You and your family are moving to another country and looking for rent accommodation. Write a letter to property agent.. introduce yourself and your family. describe a type of accommodation..give your preference for location

Essay topics:

You and your family are moving to another country and looking for rent accommodation. Write a letter to property agent.
. introduce yourself and your family
. describe a type of accommodation.
.give your preference for location

Dear Sir,

I am writing to rent an accommodation in Sydney, Australia. I am 30 years old, married women from Pakistan, Lahore. I have small unit family with my husband and two children. My husband, who is an engineer by profession, recently got a new job in Australia. He has to join his firm next week, so we are planning to travel by the end of July.

I would prefer to have a fully furnished, two bed room apartment. It must include a fully equipped kitchen with combine living room. What’s more, internet broadband and television should also be included. If possible, I would like to rent a flat with a balcony facing sea.

In addition to it, building must be in city center since my husband office is few miles from there. It should have an easy access to shopping malls, restaurants and subway station. On the top, the good schools must be near to place where I could send my kids for studies.

Please tell me know that how much this kind of accommodation would cost me.I would appreciate if you could arrange it for me.

I am looking forward to hearing you soon.
Yours sincerely,
Sara Batool.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 22, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'accommodation'.
Suggestion: accommodation
Dear Sir, I am writing to rent an accommodation in Sydney, Australia. I am 30 years old...
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Line 3, column 117, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...d, married women from Pakistan, Lahore. I have small unit family with my husband ...
^
Line 5, column 56, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'apartment' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'apartments'.
Suggestion: apartments
...to have a fully furnished, two bed room apartment. It must include a fully equipped kitch...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 116, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'easy access'.
Suggestion: easy access
...is few miles from there. It should have an easy access to shopping malls, restaurants and subw...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 76, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...his kind of accommodation would cost me.I would appreciate if you could arrange i...
^
Line 11, column 32, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r me. I am looking forward to hearing you soon. Yours sincerely, Sara Batool...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so, as to, in addition, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 4.92783505155 223% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 926.0 937.175257732 99% => OK
No of words: 200.0 206.0 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76060309309 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58650343128 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 127.690721649 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.7 0.622605031667 112% => OK
syllable_count: 275.4 290.88556701 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.2341079325 44.8134815571 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 61.7333333333 76.5299724578 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.3333333333 16.8248392259 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.13333333333 4.34317383033 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.94845360825 203% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0967207745977 0.216113520407 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0316265284275 0.0766984524023 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0399526962767 0.0603063233224 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0434445872699 0.12726935374 34% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0195002647079 0.0580467560999 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.0 8.37731958763 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 70.7449484536 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 7.45979381443 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.98 8.71597938144 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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