You are a high school teacher A student of yours has just graduated with excellent marks from high school This person wants to find work Write a letter to this student in about 150 200 words Your letter should do the following things Explain how you feel

Essay topics:

You are a high school teacher. A student of yours has just graduated with excellent marks from high school. This person wants to find work.
Write a letter to this student in about 150-200 words. Your letter should do the following things:

• Explain how you feel about his high school grades.
• Explain why a college education is good.
• Explain why going to work instead of college is unwise.

Dear Mike,

Congratulation for successful completion of high school. I always believed in you and knew that you have ability to concur whatever you want to concur in your life. When I saw your report card, I was completely astonished, as, I knew that at the beginning you were struggling with the grades. It was not an easy journey for you, but you have shown consistent growth in your performance at the latter half of semester.

Tertiary education plays a pivotal role in every person's life. Firstly, it will help you to expand the knowledge and also can create lots of vocational opportunities. Secondly, education is considered very important in today's cut throat competitive era to find better career path for the future.

Having said that, selecting work over college education could be harmful for you in the future. To begin with, it will be very hard for you to get good job on the bases of only high school education, which will restrict your growth. To add on, it will not allow you to expand your horizon.

I hope you chose correct path as your whole life depends on your selection.

Regards,
Mr. Patel

Votes
Average: 8.5 (4 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS General Training

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Mike, Congratulation for successful completion...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ance at the latter half of semester. Tertiary education plays a pivotal role ...
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Line 5, column 52, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...education plays a pivotal role in every persons life. Firstly, it will help you to expa...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... better career path for the future. Having said that, selecting work over co...
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Line 9, column 18, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to correct'
Suggestion: to correct
...xpand your horizon. I hope you chose correct path as your whole life depends on your...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 939.0 937.175257732 100% => OK
No of words: 195.0 206.0 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81538461538 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60722709715 2.54303337028 103% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.651282051282 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 286.2 290.88556701 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.360824742268 277% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2174419461 44.8134815571 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.25 76.5299724578 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.25 16.8248392259 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 4.34317383033 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236451205778 0.216113520407 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0865823227601 0.0766984524023 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532734457428 0.0603063233224 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143267913499 0.12726935374 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604901961533 0.0580467560999 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 8.37731958763 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 70.7449484536 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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