You are planning to go abroad for study. You wish to do a part time job. Ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to him and in your letter:. Give some details of your study plans. explain why you need a part time job. suggest how your f

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You are planning to go abroad for study. You wish to do a part time job. Ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to him and in your letter:
. Give some details of your study plans
. explain why you need a part time job
. suggest how your friend can be of help

Hi Malisa

I Hope that this epistle of mine will find you in good health and your professional life is going good. I am penning this letter to tell you about my planning to do higher studies in Australia and need your assistance in finding a job.

I have decided to do masters in Data Science for Python from Australia. I applied for third degree of education in the University of Australia and the institute provides me an offer letter also. My course will start in next month. I have also cleared an IELTS exam as it is mandatory to apply for student visa.

I want you to help me by finding a part time job so that I can pay my fees and handle my all the expenses while living in unknown city. As you know well that my father is the only earning hand in our family. He has to run the house as well as has to pay college fees of my younger brother. My father is not financially strong that he will also pay my university expenses. He has arranged money for my tickets by withdrawing from his fixed deposit account.

You are living in Sydney from long time and have lots of contacts. So, it would be easy for you to find a part-time job for me so that I would not become burden on my parents.

Take care!! and give my love to your children. I will let you know about the flight tickets as soon as I will book.

Yours truly
Flora

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ed your assistance in finding a job. I have decided to do masters in Data Scie...
^
Line 5, column 73, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...Data Science for Python from Australia. I applied for third degree of education i...
^
Line 5, column 190, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...e institute provides me an offer letter also. My course will start in next month. I ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 36, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
.... I want you to help me by finding a part time job so that I can pay my fees and handl...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 137, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... expenses while living in unknown city. As you know well that my father is the onl...
^^
Line 11, column 13, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...e burden on my parents. Take care!! and give my love to your children. I will l...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, third, well, while, as to, you know, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 32.9175257732 152% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1090.0 937.175257732 116% => OK
No of words: 259.0 206.0 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.20849420849 4.54256449028 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 3.78020617076 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26520855107 2.54303337028 89% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 127.690721649 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555984555985 0.622605031667 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 343.8 290.88556701 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.13402061856 153% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6804123711 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.5470212731 44.8134815571 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.125 76.5299724578 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1875 16.8248392259 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8125 4.34317383033 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.94845360825 177% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283516397488 0.216113520407 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0923909358011 0.0766984524023 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748311138616 0.0603063233224 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161283350311 0.12726935374 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0757860878845 0.0580467560999 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.5 8.37731958763 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 70.7449484536 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 7.45979381443 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.84 8.71597938144 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 41.2886597938 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.