You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect Write a letter to the editor of the magazine In your letter Correct the information in the article Explain why it is impor

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You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.
Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter
Correct the information in the article
Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information
Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

Dear sir,
I am writing this letter to inform you about the mistake that I found while reading an article in your esteemed magazine. I have been a reader of your magazine for three years. In the latest edition of it, you have written an article on my area-Chamba. I would like to draw your attention to some incorrect information which was given in your article.
it was written in the article that chamba area will have snowfall in the last days of april.but actually, in the last days of April, there is little rain resulting no snow fall. The information mentioned in the article may mislead the tourists to make their plans to visit Chamba in the last days of April to look and enjoy the snowfall, but their expectations will not be fulfilled as there will be no snowfall in the last days of April instead it will fall in the month of June. secondly, you have written that there are ample of means to transport to a higher peak of Chamba. but in reality fewer means of transport available in the peak season for tourists.
Many people who want to explore the valleys of Chamba are following your magazine. such kind of misinformation can mislead them. while mentioning anything in your article do some research and give only that information that is genuine and correct. so that no tourists feel deceived and missed the scenery the wished to see.
I hope you will admire my suggestion and work on it.
yours faithfully,
WISDOM

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ten in the article that chamba area will have snowfall in the last days of april....
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... little rain resulting no snow fall. The information mentioned in the article may...
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...lable in the peak season for tourists. Many people who want to explore the vall...
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...l admire my suggestion and work on it. yours faithfully, WISDOM
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, look, may, second, secondly, so, while, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 26.3917525773 148% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1182.0 937.175257732 126% => OK
No of words: 256.0 206.0 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6171875 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 3.78020617076 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49275072006 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 127.690721649 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54296875 0.622605031667 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 366.3 290.88556701 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.5782615089 44.8134815571 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.4285714286 76.5299724578 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2857142857 16.8248392259 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 4.34317383033 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 2.54639175258 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30786781011 0.216113520407 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103105473606 0.0766984524023 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101578092645 0.0603063233224 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179232521275 0.12726935374 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.180734915265 0.0580467560999 311% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 8.37731958763 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 70.7449484536 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 7.45979381443 106% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 8.71597938144 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 41.2886597938 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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