You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect Write a letter to the editor of the magazine In your letter correct the information in the article explain why it is impor

Essay topics:

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.
Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter

correct the information in the article
explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information
suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am a regular reader and a great fan of your travel magazine " Exotic Destinations". In the recent issue, the magazine highlighted our town "Dharmshala" which is quite a beautiful place to visit in the Himalayas. Also, It would make our town famous worldwide, and attract many international tourists.

However, the article contained some incorrect information that I am concerned about. First, Dharmashala is in the Himachal state not the Uttarakhand state of India. Secondly, the place has serene surroundings and it is not prone to frequent rampant storms as claimed in the article. Besides, the storm came in Uttarkhand state which is just adjacent to Himachal state as both covers the mountains of the Himalayas.

I believe erroneous facts may confuse your readers and deters many to visit our town as tourists. It is one of the famous tourist places in India, and the wrong tabloid posted in your magazine will have a negative impact on the local's income.

In light of the situation, I would request you to please check the real ground facts before issuing any piece of article in your magazine. And, please share the correct information with your readers in next month's magazine.

Thank you in advance.

Yours faithfully,
Shwatank Bhasin

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 229, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'locals'' or 'local's'?
Suggestion: locals'; local's
...zine will have a negative impact on the locals income. In light of the situation, ...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 208, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'months'' or 'month's'?
Suggestion: months'; month's
...t information with your readers in next months magazine. Thank you in advance. ...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 32.9175257732 58% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1091.0 937.175257732 116% => OK
No of words: 209.0 206.0 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22009569378 4.54256449028 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95505584186 2.54303337028 116% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 127.690721649 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598086124402 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 330.3 290.88556701 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.8298502552 44.8134815571 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.9230769231 76.5299724578 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0769230769 16.8248392259 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15384615385 4.34317383033 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258728903342 0.216113520407 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.083186153328 0.0766984524023 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066967555283 0.0603063233224 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113696511704 0.12726935374 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349140121182 0.0580467560999 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 8.37731958763 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 70.7449484536 78% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 8.71597938144 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 7.59969072165 117% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 41.2886597938 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 8.62886597938 81% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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