You have just won two tickets to a concert and want to invite your friend to go with you.
Write a letter to your friend. In the letter
• give details about the concert
• describe how you won the tickets
• explain why you’ve chosen your friend to go with you.
Dear Sarah,
Hope you day is sailing well. I have won two tickets to Homayoun’s concert and wanted to invite you to to come with me.
The concert will be held in the Queen Elizabeth’s theatre in Hornby street. It will be a one hour concert followed by traditional Persian dance performed by Yasi, a famous young dancer in Vancouver.
It is interesting how I won this ticket. The other day I was signing up in a website for dance classes and there was a promotion going on there. If you registry for a 10 session training you would enter a pool in which if your name was drawn, you will be awarded with two concert tickets. After two days I received an email from the art centre in which they were written that I have won. I was thrilled because as you know I have never won a single penny in my life.
I thought of inviting you the minute I saw the ad of the concert because I knew hoe much you admire Homayoun. I recall that one time you were talking about how he is an professional artist and you do not have to be Persian to enjoy his voice.
Let me know if you are free and interested to come.
Look forward to hearing back from you.
Best regards,
Rana
Comments
Dear John, How have you been…
Dear John,
How have you been doing? It’s been so long since we were last in touch. I have a great news to share that I have won two tickets to a concert. Delightedly, I would like to invite you to attend this most anticipated event.
This concert will be held at Green Park Stadium in Calgary on May,30 and it will be based on Rock theme. Moreover, many top notch bands are going to perform live over there and free drinks will be served.
As you know that I am quite into the online arcade games and during the time I was playing one of those, I came across an quiz wherein, it was mentioned that one can win two passes for the concert. Apparently, I gave a shot to it and won it luckily.
Keeping in mind the genre of the event; I thought of asking you for this event as you are so dear to me. I am sure we will thoroughly enjoy this evening. Don’t worry about the commutation, I will pick you from your place at 7:00 PM.
Please let me know if you are interested. I look forward to meet you at the day of event.
Cheers,
Mark
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 12, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sarah, Hope you day is sailing well. I have won...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
...apos;s concert and wanted to invite you to to come with me. The concert will be ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ersian dance performed by Yasi, a famous young dancer in Vancouver. I...
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Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...raining you would enter a pool in which if your name was drawn, you will be awarde...
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Line 17, column 290, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ll be awarded with two concert tickets. After two days I received an email from the a...
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Line 23, column 111, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...se I knew hoe much you admire Homayoun. I recall that one time you were talking a...
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Line 23, column 167, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...e time you were talking about how he is an professional artist and you do not have...
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Line 35, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...aring back from you. Best regards, Rana
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, may, well, talking about, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.48453608247 187% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 994.0 937.175257732 106% => OK
No of words: 224.0 206.0 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4375 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47261387116 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607142857143 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 299.7 290.88556701 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5784033528 44.8134815571 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.0 76.5299724578 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 16.8248392259 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.14285714286 4.34317383033 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.390791970192 0.216113520407 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130541830242 0.0766984524023 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100189217706 0.0603063233224 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194374738908 0.12726935374 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113661086639 0.0580467560999 196% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 8.37731958763 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 70.7449484536 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 7.45979381443 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 8.71597938144 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.97 7.59969072165 92% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 41.2886597938 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.