You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter describe the item.Explain where and when you left itSay what action you would like the company to take write at least 150 words.

Essay topics:

You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter describe the item.

Explain where and when you left it

Say what action you would like the company to take write at least 150 words.

<p class="MsoNormal">Dear Sir / Madam,<o:p></o:p></p>

<p class="MsoNormal">My name is Ahmed Karem, and I am a frequent traveller on your

railways. I would like to inform you about the loss of my bag on one of your

trains, which is a valuable gift from my father.<o:p></o:p></p>

<p class="MsoNormal">On Thursday the 15<sup>th </sup>of January on train number 55

route B, heading from Cairo to Alexandria. I had a phone call which distracted

me; I probably left the bag on seat number 45C. It was a black leather bag with

a silver belt which holds my personal laptop plus my wallet including my credit

card and valuable items. <o:p></o:p></p>

<p class="MsoNormal">I would be grateful, if you could help me in finding my bag

by taking the required action in such cases. I also request to contact the

railway staff, who were on duty during that time; moreover, hanging a notice

with the bag’s description would be useful.<o:p></o:p></p>

<p class="MsoNormal">&nbsp;I am looking forward

to hearing from you and thank you in advance for your anticipated support. Should

there be any queries, kindly contact me on 95782521.<o:p></o:p></p>

<p class="MsoNormal">Faithfully yours,<o:p></o:p></p>

<p class="MsoNormal">Ahmed Karem<o:p></o:p></p>

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 48, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , ...s='MsoNormal'>Dear Sir / Madam,

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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Railways
...and I am a frequent traveller on your railways. I would like to inform you about the l...
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Line 19, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Route
...h of January on train number 55 route B, heading from Cairo to Alexandria. I ...
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Line 21, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Me
.... I had a phone call which distracted me; I probably left the bag on seat number...
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Line 25, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Card
...op plus my wallet including my credit card and valuable items.

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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: By
...f you could help me in finding my bag by taking the required action in such case...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: To
...rmal'> I am looking forward to hearing from you and thank you in advan...
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Line 47, column 48, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , ...s='MsoNormal'>Faithfully yours,

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, moreover, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1204.0 937.175257732 128% => OK
No of words: 187.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.4385026738 4.54256449028 142% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 6.54105673943 2.54303337028 257% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 127.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.679144385027 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 301.5 290.88556701 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 16.3608247423 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.3751890447 44.8134815571 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.0 76.5299724578 225% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 26.7142857143 16.8248392259 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 4.34317383033 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 18.0 4.29896907216 419% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0844644385505 0.216113520407 39% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0496957741041 0.0766984524023 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482608627073 0.0603063233224 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0327117113157 0.12726935374 26% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052439229744 0.0580467560999 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.3 8.37731958763 266% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 70.7449484536 64% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 7.45979381443 180% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 20.37 8.71597938144 234% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 7.59969072165 118% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 41.2886597938 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 8.54432989691 145% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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