You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter describe the item.Explain where and when you left itSay what action you would like the company to take write at least 150 words.

Essay topics:

You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter describe the item.

Explain where and when you left it

Say what action you would like the company to take write at least 150 words.

<p class="MsoNormal">Dear Sir / Madam,<o:p></o:p></p>

<p class="MsoNormal">My name is Ahmed Karem, and I am a frequent traveller on

your trains. I would like to inform you about the loss of my bag on one of your

company’ trains.<o:p></o:p></p>

<p class="MsoNormal">On Thursday the 15<sup>th </sup>of January on train number 55

route B, heading from Cairo to Alexandria at 9:50. When I was heading to work, I

had a phone call which distracted me; I probably left the bag on seat number

45C. It is a black leather bag with a silver belt; it holds my personal laptop,

and my wallet which includes my credit card and valuable items. Furthermore, it

is a valuable gift from my father.<o:p></o:p></p>

<p class="MsoNormal">I would be grateful, if you could help me find my bag by

taking the required action in such cases. I also request to contact the railway

staff, who were on duty during that time; moreover, hanging a notice with the

bag’s descriptions would be useful.<o:p></o:p></p>

<p class="MsoNormal">&nbsp;I look forward to

hearing from you and thank you in advance for your anticipated support. Should there

be any queries, please contact me on 95782521 or via mail: ahmedkarem45@gmail.com.<o:p></o:p></p>

<p class="MsoNormal">Faithfully yours,<o:p></o:p></p>

<p class="MsoNormal">Ahmed Karem<o:p></o:p></p>

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , ...s='MsoNormal'>Dear Sir / Madam,

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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Your
...rem, and I am a frequent traveller on your trains. I would like to inform you abou...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Route
...h of January on train number 55 route B, heading from Cairo to Alexandria at ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Taking
..., if you could help me find my bag by taking the required action in such cases. I al...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Hearing
...oNormal'> I look forward to hearing from you and thank you in advance for y...
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Line 49, column 48, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , ...s='MsoNormal'>Faithfully yours,

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, look, moreover, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1279.0 937.175257732 136% => OK
No of words: 199.0 206.0 97% => OK
Chars per words: 6.42713567839 4.54256449028 141% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75589349951 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 6.74895547474 2.54303337028 265% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 135.0 127.690721649 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.678391959799 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 320.4 290.88556701 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 16.3608247423 171% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.7155669314 44.8134815571 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 182.714285714 76.5299724578 239% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 28.4285714286 16.8248392259 169% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85714285714 4.34317383033 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 19.0 4.29896907216 442% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0940159382783 0.216113520407 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0542794076318 0.0766984524023 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497461623986 0.0603063233224 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0357913771765 0.12726935374 28% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542665062973 0.0580467560999 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.1 8.37731958763 276% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 70.7449484536 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 3.82989690722 292% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 7.45979381443 190% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 20.31 8.71597938144 233% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 7.59969072165 115% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 8.54432989691 154% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 8.15463917526 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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