You have recently bought a electronic device It was broken after a while Write a complaint letter to the store manager and say What and when did you buy Why was it broken Suggest how the problem could be solved

Essay topics:

You have recently bought a electronic device. It was broken after a while. Write a complaint letter to the store manager and say:
- What and when did you buy?
- Why was it broken?
- Suggest how the problem could be solved.

Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with my new MP3 player which I bought that last month from your authorized shop.
I bought a W-50 series one for 100$ with two years warranty which sale person told me it is the last model. After a couple of days it was broken and neither play button nor USB worked properly.I was very surprised to discover those serious problem in few days. can you imagine how much worse could it be. Subsequently, I went to you and ask for replacement. You assistance said that if I wanted to replace my device with new one, I would wait for two weeks or he can change it with the another low-level one. I am really found of gadgets and you know how awful it was.
I am really disappointed with your product and you services have I received. Thus I expected for the full refund of 100$ as soon as possible.
I am look forward hearing from you.
Yours Faithfully,
Amirreza Hashemi

Votes
Average: 9.3 (4 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 32, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$100'.
Suggestion: $100
...d shop. I bought a W-50 series one for 100$ with two years warranty which sale pers...
^^^^
Line 3, column 193, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...her play button nor USB worked properly.I was very surprised to discover those se...
^
Line 3, column 261, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Can
...over those serious problem in few days. can you imagine how much worse could it be....
^^^
Line 4, column 52, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[4]
Message: The pronoun 'you' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'service'
Suggestion: service
... disappointed with your product and you services have I received. Thus I expected for th...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 77, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...oduct and you services have I received. Thus I expected for the full refund of 100$ ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 116, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$100'.
Suggestion: $100
... Thus I expected for the full refund of 100$ as soon as possible. I am look forward...
^^^^
Line 7, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ou. Yours Faithfully, Amirreza Hashemi
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, really, so, thus, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 26.3917525773 61% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 763.0 937.175257732 81% => OK
No of words: 171.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46198830409 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61617157096 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5714907252 2.54303337028 101% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 127.690721649 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.678362573099 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 227.7 290.88556701 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.931765273 44.8134815571 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.3636363636 76.5299724578 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5454545455 16.8248392259 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72727272727 4.34317383033 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 7.41237113402 13% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.49484536082 334% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199705505943 0.216113520407 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759883628629 0.0766984524023 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637199745225 0.0603063233224 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0978161037952 0.12726935374 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0685154378158 0.0580467560999 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 8.37731958763 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 70.7449484536 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 7.45979381443 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.29 8.71597938144 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 41.2886597938 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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