You have started a course after reading its details in a brochure Unfortunately it turned out to be totally different from the description in the brochure Write a letter to the manager including the following Mention the details of the course Explain how

Essay topics:

You have started a course after reading its details in a brochure. Unfortunately it turned out to be totally different from the description in the brochure. Write a letter to the manager, including the following: -
Mention the details of the course. -
Explain how it was different. -
What course you would like to take instead?

Dear sir,

I am a native dweller of Ludhiana, living in the model town. The purpose of mine to pen down this epistle is to complain about the wrong information provided in the brochure of your institution.

Yours institute provide various courses related the cookery. I read all the details in your broacher and enrolled in the course c003, which deals with South Indian cuisines. As, I have a keen interest to know about the different cuisines which are prevailing all over in South India. Due to this, I joined course with great enthusiasm but the first day they started with North Indian dishes. On that time, I was in dilemma that what is going on and than I asked the instructor than they informed me that C003 was a course in Indian cusinies and South Indian dishes were also a part of this course and it would be taught in the final week of the 12 week course.

Actually, I would like to intend in purely South Indian cuisines because I very well is known about the north Indian cuisines, as belong to North India. Fortunately, my mother has great culinary skills and I learnt about all North Indian dishes from her, besides this I love South Indian Dosa and idli, due to this I want to enrolled in this course. If your centre provides this course, I would like to get a transfer to that course. Apart from this, in case such course is not available in your institution, I would like to refund my whole money that I have been paid for the wrong course.

It would be very grateful if you provide the correct information in the brochure. I am looking forward to hear from you.

Yours sincerely,
Aman

Votes
Average: 3.7 (5 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 175, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...which deals with South Indian cuisines. As, I have a keen interest to know about t...
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Line 5, column 450, Rule ID: AND_THAN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'then'?
Suggestion: then
...as in dilemma that what is going on and than I asked the instructor than they inform...
^^^^
Line 9, column 104, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to hearing'.
Suggestion: to hearing
...n in the brochure. I am looking forward to hear from you. Yours sincerely, Aman
^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d to hear from you. Yours sincerely, Aman
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, if, look, so, thus, well, apart from

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 45.0 32.9175257732 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 26.3917525773 182% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1329.0 937.175257732 142% => OK
No of words: 293.0 206.0 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53583617747 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 3.78020617076 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33594748031 2.54303337028 92% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 127.690721649 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522184300341 0.622605031667 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 404.1 290.88556701 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.5580954483 44.8134815571 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9285714286 76.5299724578 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9285714286 16.8248392259 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21428571429 4.34317383033 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1288180826 0.216113520407 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0498657611951 0.0766984524023 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417793904536 0.0603063233224 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0839319902128 0.12726935374 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586424467957 0.0580467560999 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 8.37731958763 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 8.71597938144 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 41.2886597938 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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