You live in a room in college which you share with another student.However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find itvery difficult to work.Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter- describe the situat

Essay topics:

You live in a room in college which you share with another student.

However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it

very difficult to work.

Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter

- describe the situation

- explain your problems and why it is difficult to work

- say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Sir,

My self Milan Desai, I am currently living in Wing-B of student union building in Northwest complex, London. I am writing this epistle to express my dissatisfaction towards accommodation arrangement that I have right now. I am sharing this accommodation with fellow student which I found difficult to live-in and all of these are hampering my study.

The major problem with shared accommodation is that no two person are never alike and their though process do not match. We have a very different type of living. I work in a morning shift (9 AM to 6 PM) while my roommate works in a day shift (1 PM to 10 PM). When she returned home, she watches television and carry on with her stuff but all this activities of her disturb me a lot. I can not study peacefully in my room. Besides this, most of the time she brings her friend to our room and stay awake until mid night.

I can not study anymore in this room as I am not able to concentrate on my study due to these unavoidable circumstances caused by her. I would like to have a room with reading table and a single bed in a different complex. I would really appreciate your kindness if you can find me an alternate shelter. I can understand that it would be really difficult for you to find me a rearrange resident in middle of the semester but I am sure you will help me out with this current problem.

I look forward to hearing you soon.

Yours sincerely,

Milan Desai

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 339, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ion and carry on with her stuff but all this activities of her disturb me a lot. I c...
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Line 13, column 224, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...nd a single bed in a different complex. I would really appreciate your kindness i...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...f you can find me an alternate shelter. I can understand that it would be really ...
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Line 13, column 375, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... be really difficult for you to find me a rearrange resident in middle of the semester but ...
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Line 17, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...me out with this current problem. I look forward to hearing you soon. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, if, look, really, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 32.9175257732 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 26.3917525773 140% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1190.0 937.175257732 127% => OK
No of words: 266.0 206.0 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47368421053 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 3.78020617076 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69815096977 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 127.690721649 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601503759398 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 363.6 290.88556701 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.13402061856 153% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8786607023 44.8134815571 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.3333333333 76.5299724578 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7333333333 16.8248392259 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.73333333333 4.34317383033 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265057830652 0.216113520407 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0824686177747 0.0766984524023 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632623474932 0.0603063233224 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151870106443 0.12726935374 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396064290112 0.0580467560999 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 8.37731958763 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.35 8.71597938144 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 7.59969072165 95% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 41.2886597938 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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