You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work.Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter,•describe the sit

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to address my concern about my noisy room mate due to which I am unable to concentrate on my studies. I am sure my grades will go down gradually if i continue to stay with him.

As requested by you I have tried to adjust with my room mate as much as possible, however he has not changed even a little since past 2 months. he still plays loud music in the room past 8 PM every day and watches TV until 1 AM. I have tried to explain him how this is affecting my studies, but nothing has made him change his habits. Past 2 weeks he has started to bring fiends on weekends.

I would request you to assist me in relocating with a room mate who is more interested in studying than partying and staying up late night. Preferably from B.SC Year 2. This will help me in not just getting a good room mate but also a study buddy.

Your's Sincerely,
Ajam Shaikh

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 174, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ure my grades will go down gradually if i continue to stay with him. As reques...
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Line 5, column 90, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y room mate as much as possible, however he has not changed even a little since p...
^^
Line 5, column 146, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...nged even a little since past 2 months. he still plays loud music in the room past...
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Line 9, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... also a study buddy. Yours Sincerely, Ajam Shaikh
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 731.0 937.175257732 78% => OK
No of words: 174.0 206.0 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.20114942529 4.54256449028 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63192868298 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31603490988 2.54303337028 91% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.672413793103 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 216.9 290.88556701 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.41237113402 85% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9214742107 44.8134815571 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.1 76.5299724578 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4 16.8248392259 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.3 4.34317383033 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140553771949 0.216113520407 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0470412327391 0.0766984524023 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464364351218 0.0603063233224 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0942615169984 0.12726935374 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0134007433877 0.0580467560999 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.1 8.37731958763 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 88.06 70.7449484536 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 7.45979381443 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.78 8.71597938144 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 7.59969072165 91% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 41.2886597938 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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