You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.Write a letter to this friend. In your letter:•say why he/she would not enjoy going to college•expl

Essay topics:

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter:

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college

• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her

• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ...................,

Dear James,

Hello, hope you are doing great and thank you for writing to me after a long time. I learned from your letter that you are in a dilemma of whether you should be enrolled in a college or get employed.

I will suggest that initially you must do a job to gain practical experience before opting for higher education. Since I know you for a long time and I am aware of that you always wanted to become an entrepreneur, I don’t recommend you to go to a college first, as now the colleges focus more on theoretical knowledge than on practical experience. They do not help in developing skills of the students that will help them in building successful career. Thus, you will not be satisfied and get the required expertise to open a business.

Undoubtedly, working in a company will allow you to understand the work culture and gaining work experience. Moreover, it will help you to build strong connections which will benefit you in the future.

I’d like you to work in a marketing and sales position as they will help to improve your communication skills and will boost your confidence. Since you are a fresher, you can register to the employment portals such as monster.com and indeed.com which will help in job hunt.

I hope my suggestion should help you in taking the correct decision. I wish you best of luck for your future endeavours.

Best wishes.

Prabhpreet Kaur

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 15, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vours. Best wishes. Prabhpreet Kaur
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, moreover, thus, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 4.92783505155 264% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 32.9175257732 115% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 26.3917525773 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.85567010309 233% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1166.0 937.175257732 124% => OK
No of words: 245.0 206.0 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75918367347 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 3.78020617076 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76701581307 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555102040816 0.622605031667 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 352.8 290.88556701 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.5239134954 44.8134815571 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.1666666667 76.5299724578 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4166666667 16.8248392259 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 4.34317383033 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231847201803 0.216113520407 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0858308079591 0.0766984524023 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0829126612714 0.0603063233224 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147555008951 0.12726935374 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0759499749557 0.0580467560999 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 8.37731958763 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 41.2886597938 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.