You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.
Write a letter to this friend.
In your letter:
• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her
Dear Jane,
I can see that you are standing between 2 roads and don't know where to head on. I am writing this letter with my life experience and considering your circumstances, to guide you in choosing the right path.
When I took college last year at this juncture where you are now, I had to go through very rough path. As you know my family wasn't in a position to contribute funds for my higher education, my first semester was terrible as I have to skip lot of friendly invites to the opening parties. They weren't a big deal, but the point where you have no funds to afford the course materials made it more awkward. Well, then I quit after the first semester and took a job in pharmacy, it has made my life better. I feel now with the earnings I made, I have plenty of opportunity. And also the time to do my adventure of exploring the beaches around. Therefore, to me it is not a good idea to plunge into college at an early stage.
I do understand that you have been saying that you dad has retired shortly so, I am considering it is the same situation with the college fund support from your family as that I had. So, if you take a job you will be able to fill the pocket and at the same time the funds necessary for your leisure time. Also, you will have enough time to choose the best subject to pursue, added to that there so many online pre-prep courses available these days will help you perceive the best for you.
I would suggest my own stream pharmacy for you as I remember your added interest in the health care, and there are more options if you are looking into a management line. One of my colleague was saying about an internship cum job at warehouse facility of a car wrecker company, for which they are willing to offer lunch at job. I suggest you should consider it as you used to do those stocking up things at your garage with great care.
I guess I have given you a better picture of the 2 roads in front of you. I believe you will head on with the right one.
Yours loving friend,
Mike.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Dear Jane, I can see that you are standing between ...
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...at you are standing between 2 roads and dont know where to head on. I am writing thi...
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...to guide you in choosing the right path. When I took college last year at this ju...
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... very rough path. As you know my family wasnt in a position to contribute funds for m...
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Suggestion: weren't
...ly invites to the opening parties. They werent a big deal, but the point where you hav...
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...picture of the 2 roads in front of you. I believe you will head on with the right...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, then, therefore, well, i feel, i guess, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.03092783505 330% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 68.0 32.9175257732 207% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 26.3917525773 193% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1660.0 937.175257732 177% => OK
No of words: 386.0 206.0 187% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.30051813472 4.54256449028 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 3.78020617076 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40834009562 2.54303337028 95% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 127.690721649 164% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541450777202 0.622605031667 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 524.7 290.88556701 180% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.13402061856 175% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6804123711 126% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 16.3608247423 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.6731182327 44.8134815571 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.75 76.5299724578 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.125 16.8248392259 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 4.34317383033 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22835675201 0.216113520407 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0787425492662 0.0766984524023 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458305764972 0.0603063233224 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130473894957 0.12726935374 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0235522775427 0.0580467560999 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 8.37731958763 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.96 8.71597938144 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.99 7.59969072165 92% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 41.2886597938 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 8.54432989691 136% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.