You recently returned by plane from an overseas trip. When you reached home, you realised you had left your hand luggage on the plane. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter:say when and where you lost your hand luggagedescribe the bag and its co

Essay topics:

You recently returned by plane from an overseas trip. When you reached home, you realised you had left your hand luggage on the plane. Write a letter to the airline.

In your letter:

say when and where you lost your hand luggage
describe the bag and its contents
suggest the action you would like the airline to take
Write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir/Madam

I am writing to request your help in recovering a missing bag.
I am a passenger of flight number 245 from Melbourne to Bali on 24 of July. The airplane had about two hours and I was in a hurry so unfortunately, I missed my luggage on the plane. The luggage was underneath my seat
The suitcase is red in color with a black gold Marshal brand name. There is also a name tag on top of it. you can find my full name on the tag (Niloo kh). My suitcase contains some important documents such as my university degree, driving license and my wedding photos.
It would be grateful if you could inform the flight crew to make a search as soon as possible. If you find the bag you can contact me on my phone (00) so that I can arrange for its collection.
Thank you for your help in this matter.

Yours faithfully,
Niloo

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 17, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: red
...was underneath my seat The suitcase is red in color with a black gold Marshal brand name. T...
^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 26.3917525773 68% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 679.0 937.175257732 72% => OK
No of words: 159.0 206.0 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.27044025157 4.54256449028 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55098862472 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48981946755 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 127.690721649 81% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.647798742138 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 207.9 290.88556701 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.360824742268 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.1927690977 44.8134815571 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 61.7272727273 76.5299724578 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4545454545 16.8248392259 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.90909090909 4.34317383033 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230454671074 0.216113520407 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0894988879258 0.0766984524023 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693407275346 0.0603063233224 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134090366061 0.12726935374 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0701206755617 0.0580467560999 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.9 8.37731958763 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.65 70.7449484536 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 7.45979381443 70% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 6.89 8.71597938144 79% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.91 7.59969072165 91% => OK
difficult_words: 26.0 41.2886597938 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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