You went to a theater yesterday with a friend Your friend had an accident and a staff member helped Write to manager How it happened How staff member helped What should be done in future

Essay topics:

You went to a theater yesterday with a friend. Your friend had an accident and a staff member helped. Write to manager:
• How it happened
• How staff member helped
• What should be done in future.

Dear Mr. Smith,

I am writing to complain about poor waste management of your theatre. my friend suffered serious accident while we both were exiting the premise after enjoying the evening
show
, and I believe things would not have gone wrong, if you had taken measures earlier.

I, along with my friend Martha, am a regular visitor to your theatre that we pay a visit once in a week. Yesterday, she could not see a lying banana peel while exiting in low-lit theatre and stepped on it. As a result, she had sudden fall on the floor. Luckily the responsible staff for that zone came very fast and managed to provide first-aid to her. So far I can remember, his name is Luis. we were also complemented with home-drop service by your theatre. my friend’s injury could have gone really bad, if your authorities would not have taken actions fast.

However, nobody expect that wastages lie on a theatre floor. this not only a matter of health-hazard, but also a concern of hygiene. I would highly request you to take immediate steps to keep the theatre neat and clean. you can run an inspection after each
show
finishes to keep control over the cleaning staffs in this regard.

I look forward to seeking a audience friendly theatre soon.

Kind regards,

Tasnim Fahmi

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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... poor waste management of your theatre. my friend suffered serious accident while ...
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...remise after enjoying the evening show , and I believe things would not have gon...
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..., if you had taken measures earlier. I, along with my friend Martha, am a reg...
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...o far I can remember, his name is Luis. we were also complemented with home-drop s...
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...with home-drop service by your theatre. my friend’s injury could have gone really ...
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...s would not have taken actions fast. However, nobody expect that wastages lie...
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Message: The pronoun 'nobody' must be used with a third-person verb: 'expects'.
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...n actions fast. However, nobody expect that wastages lie on a theatre floor. t...
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...t that wastages lie on a theatre floor. this not only a matter of health-hazard, but...
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Suggestion: You
...eps to keep the theatre neat and clean. you can run an inspection after each show ...
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... the cleaning staffs in this regard. I look forward to seeking a audience fri...
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...gard. I look forward to seeking a audience friendly theatre soon. ...
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Suggestion:
...ng a audience friendly theatre soon. Kind regards, Tasnim Fahmi
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, really, so, while, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1082.0 937.175257732 115% => OK
No of words: 222.0 206.0 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87387387387 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8600083453 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.439931701 2.54303337028 96% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 127.690721649 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.666666666667 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 315.9 290.88556701 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2097137155 44.8134815571 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.1333333333 76.5299724578 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8 16.8248392259 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.46666666667 4.34317383033 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 2.54639175258 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169296770158 0.216113520407 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0466674309669 0.0766984524023 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0351352673977 0.0603063233224 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0791595966199 0.12726935374 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0332612720572 0.0580467560999 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 8.37731958763 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 70.7449484536 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.37 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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