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You will move to a new city for work. You know some people who live there.Write a letter to someone you know live there. In your letter » Ask them for help finding accommodation » Tell them where you would like to live » Tell them the type of pla

Essay topics: You will move to a new city for work. You know some people who live there.
Write a letter to someone you know live there. In your letter
» Ask them for help finding accommodation
» Tell them where you would like to live
» Tell them the type of place you are looking for

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Dear Ali,

I hope you are well. I am writing to ask for your help in order to find an accommodation in Melbourne.

I find a new job in an international company with good reputation in Melbourne, consequently I will move to this cosmopolitan city in the next 2 months. Since you have been living there for more than 3 years, I want to ask for your help to find an appropriate accommodation.

My new office is located in the city center but as I surf the net I realized that the rents are so high and it would not be affordable for me to pay for the house in that neighborhood as well as covering the daily costs. So I would be grateful if you could find me a house in the suburbia with the easy access to the public transportation.

I am looking for a three bedroom house with a small kitchen and a big garden, though children would have enough room to play around and spend their time. Moreover, there should be a state school in the vicinity since Sophia will go to school in the next academic semester.

Thanks for your help and support.

Best wishes,
Rahi

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 73, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'accommodation'.
Suggestion: accommodation
...g to ask for your help in order to find an accommodation in Melbourne. I find a new job in an...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... find an accommodation in Melbourne. I find a new job in an international comp...
^
Line 5, column 246, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'appropriate accommodation'.
Suggestion: appropriate accommodation
...rs, I want to ask for your help to find an appropriate accommodation. My new office is located in the cit...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, if, look, moreover, so, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 880.0 937.175257732 94% => OK
No of words: 201.0 206.0 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.37810945274 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6789554969 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582089552239 0.622605031667 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 268.2 290.88556701 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.6993410178 44.8134815571 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0 76.5299724578 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1 16.8248392259 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 4.34317383033 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248648406376 0.216113520407 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0972298886495 0.0766984524023 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707162612784 0.0603063233224 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148637003616 0.12726935374 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0708271789614 0.0580467560999 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 8.37731958763 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 70.7449484536 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.12 8.71597938144 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.75 7.59969072165 89% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 41.2886597938 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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