You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job.Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letterdescribe the problem with the equipmentexplain how this problem is affecting your wor

Essay topics:

You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job.
Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter
describe the problem with the equipment
explain how this problem is affecting your work
say what you want the shop or company to do

Dear Sir,

I am writing this on the inconvenience caused with my laptop which I have purchased in your shop a few weeks before. I work from home and have issue with the display screen which has stopped all of a sudden.

I have purchased the laptop with you a week before (i.e., 24th August) . Initially , for a week the laptop was working but all of a sudden the display has stopped and they were red dots on it even though the laptop is running but I cannot view anything on the screen . I have a lot of projects and important files saved in the laptop which I am not able view .

I am a freelancer and I have a few running projects to complete and the issue I have with my laptop is quiet galling and wasting a lot of time on work submission . I have spent a lot of money on purchasing the laptop and it ended with no use .I do have a warranty for 1 year service and my service number is 123456 and I have attached the purchase receipt and I request you to solve the issue without any deal .

Before that make sure that the same problem would not repeat again and disturb me with my work schedule and which in turn leaves a bad remark about your sales.

Yours faithfully,
Kalyani .

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 138, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...a few weeks before. I work from home and have issue with the display screen which...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...n which has stopped all of a sudden. I have purchased the laptop with you a we...
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Line 5, column 69, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...with you a week before i.e., 24th August . Initially , for a week the laptop was w...
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Line 5, column 81, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...eek before i.e., 24th August . Initially , for a week the laptop was working but a...
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Line 5, column 265, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...but I cannot view anything on the screen . I have a lot of projects and important ...
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Line 5, column 357, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...d in the laptop which I am not able view . I am a freelancer and I have a few r...
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Line 7, column 162, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...wasting a lot of time on work submission . I have spent a lot of money on purchasi...
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Line 7, column 165, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ting a lot of time on work submission . I have spent a lot of money on purchasing...
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Line 7, column 242, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...sing the laptop and it ended with no use .I do have a warranty for 1 year service ...
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Line 7, column 244, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...ng the laptop and it ended with no use .I do have a warranty for 1 year service ...
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Line 7, column 244, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ng the laptop and it ended with no use .I do have a warranty for 1 year service ...
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Line 7, column 283, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
....I do have a warranty for 1 year service and my service number is 123456 and I ha...
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Line 7, column 411, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... you to solve the issue without any deal . Before that make sure that the same ...
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Line 9, column 55, Rule ID: REPEAT_AGAIN[1]
Message: Use simply 'repeat'.
Suggestion: repeat
...ke sure that the same problem would not repeat again and disturb me with my work schedule an...
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Line 9, column 108, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and disturb me with my work schedule and which in turn leaves a bad remark about ...
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Line 12, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ur sales. Yours faithfully, Kalyani .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 5.05154639175 277% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 970.0 937.175257732 104% => OK
No of words: 228.0 206.0 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.25438596491 4.54256449028 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2803349686 2.54303337028 90% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517543859649 0.622605031667 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 299.7 290.88556701 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 16.3608247423 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.2756409901 44.8134815571 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.777777778 76.5299724578 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 16.8248392259 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.777777777778 4.34317383033 18% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 2.54639175258 628% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.49484536082 334% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262234019585 0.216113520407 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121744144924 0.0766984524023 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532723827616 0.0603063233224 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164756747832 0.12726935374 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0560023486323 0.0580467560999 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 8.37731958763 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.48 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.67 8.71597938144 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 7.59969072165 94% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 41.2886597938 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 8.54432989691 140% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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