You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.Write a letter to your manager. In your letter•describe the training course you want to do•explain what the company could do

Essay topics:

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do

• explain what the company could do to help you

• say how the course will be useful for your job

Dear Mr. Hasani,

I am writing with regards a new educational course I have met at AMT website and I am writing to ask your kind permission to apply this course.

As I mentioned, I saw this advertisement at AMT website which as you now is offering the most modern technology in the file of gas turbine manufacturing. This course is about last version of protective coating of gas turbine component and this is the reason that I am really keen on to apply. According to the curriculum, different type of coating would be introduced and discussed as well as the state-of-the-art of repair method.

I would appreciate it if you permit me to attend this course. Since it would be held in their company for 5 days, I need to travel there which require a valid visa and arranging for accommodation.

With regard to the benefits of this course, I should say that a great deal of knowledge would be transferred which leads to significant development in our production process. In other words, I estimate that most of our question will be answered and the quality of our production will boost considerably.

I am looking forward to hear from you.

Thank you for your consideration.

Yours sincerely,

Yalda Asgari.

Votes
Average: 8.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 19, column 22, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to hearing'.
Suggestion: to hearing
...onsiderably. I am looking forward to hear from you. Thank you for your consider...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, really, so, well, as well as, in other words, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1027.0 937.175257732 110% => OK
No of words: 210.0 206.0 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89047619048 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02505036408 2.54303337028 119% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 127.690721649 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595238095238 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 308.7 290.88556701 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8137222339 44.8134815571 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3636363636 76.5299724578 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0909090909 16.8248392259 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36363636364 4.34317383033 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214715937097 0.216113520407 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0926774204907 0.0766984524023 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0845946695104 0.0603063233224 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129958000412 0.12726935374 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0981880545118 0.0580467560999 169% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 8.37731958763 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 8.71597938144 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 41.2886597938 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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