You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
Describe the training course you want to do
Explain what the company could do to help you
Say how the course will be useful for your job
Dear Sir or Madam,
I hope this letter finds you well. Recently I have seen a commercial news about a training lesson which will improve my job performance and benefit our international corporation. therefore, I am really keen to apply for it.
Let me explain you in details. As we are working to rise the security of a various range of company’s network infrastructure, it is necessary to be up-to-date. therefore, it seems this training course will satisfy our needs as well. The syllabus is contain three different level of retaining switches and firewalls from exotic attacks.
Furthermore, the cost of this lesson is staggering high, So I was wondering to ask you to discuss with company for a subside which really help me to balance my work/life budget.
Besides that, the course will describe the new protocols that hackers are using to attack firewalls and will also give us a free CD collection of new EMC firewall updates and patches which is greatly helpful for our company and help me to maintenance our security problem better and after this course I will be able to restructure our network architecture to reduce the vulnerable path and routes where we may face attacks. Your assistance in this matter is greatly appreciated.
Your sincerely,
us;mso-fareast-language:EN-us;mso-bidi-language:AR-SA">Chi Chung
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 57, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'commercial news'.
Suggestion: commercial news
...er finds you well. Recently I have seen a commercial news about a training lesson which will impr...
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Line 5, column 180, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
... benefit our international corporation. therefore, I am really keen to apply for it. ...
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Line 9, column 166, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...ture, it is necessary to be up-to-date. therefore, it seems this training course will sat...
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Line 9, column 255, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'contained'.
Suggestion: contained
...isfy our needs as well. The syllabus is contain three different level of retaining swit...
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Line 13, column 116, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... to ask you to discuss with company for a subside which really help me to balance my work...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, furthermore, if, may, really, so, therefore, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1152.0 937.175257732 123% => OK
No of words: 214.0 206.0 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38317757009 4.54256449028 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82475343497 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.91914047897 2.54303337028 193% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 127.690721649 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630841121495 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 349.2 290.88556701 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 105.035373813 44.8134815571 234% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 104.727272727 76.5299724578 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4545454545 16.8248392259 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.81818181818 4.34317383033 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268640547933 0.216113520407 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0879902699338 0.0766984524023 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.040308769722 0.0603063233224 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125081637336 0.12726935374 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.070248065442 0.0580467560999 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 8.37731958763 162% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 70.7449484536 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 8.71597938144 160% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 7.59969072165 114% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 41.2886597938 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 8.62886597938 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 8.15463917526 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.