Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.
Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:
• Say why you would like to go on the trip
• Suggest what you could do to help during the trip
• Ask other questions about the trip
Dear Sir/Madam,
I recently came through an invite for the parents to accompany their children to an educational trip to Seattle. I would like to express my interest for the same, and would be delighted to join the student’s group travelling on 25th october from YVR international airport.
Speaking to few of the teachers, I realised that the main aim of the tour is to encourage learning. Museum of flights being one of the major highlights of this expedition would bring my decade of experience of being an air stewardess handy.This will be in conjuction with my pilot training, which will provide a comprehensive overview of various planes, their history along with the cockpit buttons and their power supply.
Furthermore, I know quite a few people who work in the art industries, and I can arrange a special talk by one of the curator in the chiuly museum of garden and glass, only if time permits. In addition, I can also prepare few handouts for children so they are abreast with the schedules and places the school intend to cover in this trip.
However, since this is a festival season, I was curious to know, if the school has already booked the tickets for the museum of flight or will be booking it on the day of arrival.
I would be grateful if you could respond at your earliest convenience.
Yours faithfully,
John Brown
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 28, Rule ID: AN_INVITE[1]
Message: Use only in informal register. In other registers, 'invitation' should be used.
Suggestion: invitation
.../Madam, I recently came through an invite for the parents to accompany their chil...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 10, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...VR international airport. Speaking to few of the teachers, I realised that th...
^^
Line 9, column 241, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...rience of being an air stewardess handy.This will be in conjuction with my pilot tra...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 4.92783505155 203% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 26.3917525773 140% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1147.0 937.175257732 122% => OK
No of words: 234.0 206.0 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90170940171 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91114542567 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77214418866 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 127.690721649 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628205128205 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 333.9 290.88556701 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 16.3608247423 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.7454094292 44.8134815571 176% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.444444444 76.5299724578 167% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 16.8248392259 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77777777778 4.34317383033 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122746108117 0.216113520407 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.053608963164 0.0766984524023 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043038529908 0.0603063233224 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0698770870044 0.12726935374 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454626715034 0.0580467560999 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 8.37731958763 174% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 70.7449484536 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 8.71597938144 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 7.59969072165 119% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 41.2886597938 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 8.54432989691 145% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.