Your local council has decided to close the only park in your town and build a car park in its place You believe this will have a bad effect on the people who live and work in the town Write a letter to the mayor In your letter introduce yourself explain

Essay topics:

Your local council has decided to close the only park in your town and build a car park in its place. You believe this will have a bad effect on the people who live and work in the town.

Write a letter to the mayor. In your letter

introduce yourself
explain why you think the decision is wrong
say what you think the council should do instead

Dear Sir,

My name is John Carberry and I live at sector - 40, Gurgaon since 2010. As, I have been residing in this sector for quite along time, I know about each and every places of this area such as parks, market and community centre. I am an engineer by profession and works with a information technology multinational company which is location in New Delhi.

Last month, I was informed by my neighbours that local authorities have taken decision to replace a public family park with a car parking area. I personally believe that the public parks are more important, because it provides us fresh oxigen and peaceful place to spend some quality time. Moreover, it gives opportunity to children and elders to meet and greet people from different cultures.

I would like to request you to reverse this decision of closing the public park, you should raise awareness about not to buy new cars instead. By doing this, number of cars in our locality will not rise and there would be less vehicles and less noise pollution.

I am looking forward to hearing from you as soon as possible.

Yours sincerely,
Jay Larosa

Votes
Average: 9.5 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 123, Rule ID: ALONG_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'a long time'?
Suggestion: a long time
... been residing in this sector for quite along time, I know about each and every places of ...
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Line 3, column 273, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...n engineer by profession and works with a information technology multinational co...
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Line 7, column 223, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun vehicles is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...cality will not rise and there would be less vehicles and less noise pollution. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, moreover, so, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 940.0 937.175257732 100% => OK
No of words: 194.0 206.0 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84536082474 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73207559907 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.516250929 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 127.690721649 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.721649484536 0.622605031667 116% => OK
syllable_count: 292.5 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.111251578 44.8134815571 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0 76.5299724578 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 16.8248392259 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.1 4.34317383033 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227438317958 0.216113520407 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738483395664 0.0766984524023 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465484219968 0.0603063233224 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0989991166888 0.12726935374 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516695780471 0.0580467560999 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 8.37731958763 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 8.71597938144 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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