Your local hospital has advertised people to do unpaid work helping at the hospital. You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time.
Write a letter to the hospital. In your letter
explain why you would like to do unpaid work at the hospital
say what type of unpaid work you would be able to do
give details of when you would be available for this work
You should write at least 150 words.
Dear Sir or Madam,
My name is Pious, I am from Bangalore .I am writing this letter with regards to an advertisement for unpaid work required at the hospital due to the outbreak of cholera.
I have just completed my formal training as a Nurse in KPGM college in UP. I want to be a part of the hospital in this critical time and will not have issues working for the hospital for free. This experience will further help me enhance my knowledge and the same time be a part of a social cause.
Moreover, I am trained in monitoring symptoms of flu, diarrhea. With a brief internship in the radiology department I can help with ultrasounds and Xrays for the patients.
As my classes for the master’s course will not start until May next year so I would like to use this opportunity to work with the hospital and its team for that duration.
Hoping to hear back from you soon.
Yours faithfully,
Pious
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 38, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
..., My name is Pious, I am from Bangalore .I am writing this letter with regards to...
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Line 2, column 40, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
... My name is Pious, I am from Bangalore .I am writing this letter with regards to ...
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Line 2, column 103, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...r with regards to the advertisement for a unpaid work required at the hospital du...
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Line 3, column 75, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ining as a Nurse in KPGM college in UP. I want to be a part of the hospital in th...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...es working for the hospital for free. I am trained in monitoring symptoms of fl...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
moreover, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 32.9175257732 52% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 689.0 937.175257732 74% => OK
No of words: 153.0 206.0 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.50326797386 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51700396316 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6080315099 2.54303337028 103% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 127.690721649 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.62091503268 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 207.0 290.88556701 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.3461523876 44.8134815571 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.5555555556 76.5299724578 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 16.8248392259 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.33333333333 4.34317383033 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29952967607 0.216113520407 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10036667001 0.0766984524023 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0807688087508 0.0603063233224 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133711788651 0.12726935374 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0783955135425 0.0580467560999 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 8.37731958763 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.52 8.71597938144 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 41.2886597938 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.