It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not.However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.Discuss both these views

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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not.
However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is true that some gifted people could be good at some certain field. While, I believe whether people who have talent or not, they all have chance to be excellent at their chosen field by learning hard.

There is no doubt that some children have extraordinary talents to knowledge certain stuff with little instructing by teachers or their parents. Mozart known to a genius musician, would be the best example for this. He showed his music talent at three years old and created his first composition at eight-year-old, composing an amount of masterpiece of music before died. However, although Mozart was called "prodigy" , he continuously devoted himself to learning music for entire life. Those kind of gifted people without further educating and practicing, eventually, they would just as ''ordinary'' as others. Therefor, there is old saying:Genius is one percent inspiration and ninety-nine percent perspiration.

By contrast, most of people do not have natural aptitude or skill, but they are likely to develop their talent and become an outstanding specialist through application and perseverance. For that reason, many parents spend a fortunate on cultivating their children's talents and skill, taking them to dance studios, music classes or hiring personal sport instructors....In fact, most of successful athletes or musicians nowadays are rewarded as their persistence. John Tsai, for instance, she used be called "no talented singer" by medias in Taiwan, but turned to be "the queen of singer" after she made years painstaking effort.

In conclusion, people may be born with different degrees of ability, I believe that everyone can have remarkable achievement at certain fields as long as they are willing to learn.

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Average: 7.7 (3 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'while', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'in fact', 'kind of', 'no doubt', 'it is true']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.26213592233 0.247107548796 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.155339805825 0.15552993741 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.106796116505 0.0946569551029 113% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0647249190939 0.0437536398559 148% => OK
Prepositions: 0.122977346278 0.122223957237 101% => OK
Participles: 0.0453074433657 0.0403219363162 112% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.92361053063 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0258899676375 0.0326786765898 79% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0485436893204 0.0861751148067 56% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0161812297735 0.0214082191602 76% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00323624595469 0.0119246538136 27% => More subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, whom, Whose, That.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1730.0 1933.38276553 89% => OK
No of words: 274.0 316.052104208 87% => OK
Chars per words: 6.29090909091 6.10592293882 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20519365927 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.42700729927 0.37474360046 114% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.295620437956 0.284197041944 104% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.193430656934 0.203843217982 95% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.131386861314 0.137313986986 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92361053063 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.642335766423 0.560935902166 115% => OK
Word variations: 73.9506092476 60.7401812628 122% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0911823647 75% => OK
Sentence length: 22.8333333333 20.7725350517 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3192722092 49.5273876611 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.5874125874 93.4120437189 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 11.4965034965 15.2821509519 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.545454545455 0.594174754866 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.39078156313 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01102204409 120% => OK
Readability: 52.395377129 49.1922392462 107% => OK
Elegance: 1.72727272727 1.69127372897 102% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Topic essay coherence: 0.333077179032 0.332604825255 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0727455224632 0.102734651613 71% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0633610931005 0.0668474354756 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.513064930193 0.534917948617 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.19960137333 0.148666948902 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122783080338 0.13441755203 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649442411225 0.0742828286743 87% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.196811559439 0.324241079732 61% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0310699974669 0.0640056729886 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199273597737 0.22793763319 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0257010672889 0.0582452615562 44% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.68436873747 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.41883767535 29% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 11.0 5.88977955912 187% => Too many positive topic words.
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.60220440882 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.00200400802 50% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 12.0 10.493987976 114% => OK

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 6.5 Out of 9