Some people think that all teenagers should be required be doing unpaid work in the free times to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenagers at society as home. Do you agree or disagree.
some people assume that young generation are required to do a job sincerely without being paid on their leisure time in helping local group of people. They believe that activity will be an equal advantages between the adolescent and community. So I complete agree with this view.
Firstly, when a young people assist a local group of people it means they have to apply their knowledge which they get in school or other. For example they build free school for the people who cannot read and write. This activity will get help the young people to know how to teach. Going to society and doing good activity is one of the ways for applying knowledge.
Secondly. adolescent is term when young generation will prove that they care about problem of society which can handle with people who have young thinking, strong body and have many leisure times better than old people. For example when they society should clean their environment. They give precedence to collect all young generation for doing that activity because it will be finish faster. The benefit for young people is they can prove that they love clean of environment.
In conclusion. The mutualism will be gotten when teenage used their leisure times to help local group of people so it will be reason why I agree of this idea.
young generation are required
young generations are required
will be an equal advantages
will be an equal advantage
when a young people assist a local group of people
when a young people assists a local group of people
adolescent is term
adolescent is a term
because it will be finish faster
because it will finish faster
The benefit for young people is they can prove that they love clean of environment.
The benefit for young people is that they can prove that they love clean of environment.
so it will be reason why I agree of this idea.
so it will be the reason why I agree of this idea.
Sentence: For example when they society should clean their environment.
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to they and society
Sentence: The mutualism will be gotten when teenage used their leisure times to help local group of people so it will be reason why I agree of this idea.
Error: mutualism Suggestion: No alternate word
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No. of Words: 223 350
No. of Characters: 1044 1500
No. of Different Words: 120 200
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No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 42 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 24 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 15 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
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Sentence Length SD: 9.096 7.5
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Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.351 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.555 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.033 0.07
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