In achieving personal happiness, our relationships with other people (family, friends, colleagues) are more important than anything else. Issues such as work and wealth take second place. Argue in support of this claim.
In this era of technological evolution, people have taken great care of living standards, particularly in achieving personal happiness. Public debate has been going on over whether healthy relationships with people are the second to none factor while having a high-status job with enormous wealth should only be considered as the second place. It is agreed that the connection between individuals and others will play an essential part in gaining joy in life. Not being misleading by work and wealth and having a sacred sanctuary when needed will be analyzed to prove this thesis true.
Firstly, giving too much attention to a career can culminate in the distance with some of the most important people and the loss of true meanings in life. For instance, some adults who focus heavily on job prospects consequently live to regret their negligence for forsaking their parents growing older day by day, indeed it is understandable if they forget their initial passion and desire to gravitate toward money and wealth. As can be seen, it leads to one big query whether how many people on Earth can follow their dreams to achieve genuine happiness and not appeal to enormous wealth. Thus, this makes it clear that work and wealth should not be given priority at any time in terms of personal enjoyment.
Secondly, it would be good fortune for every individual if there exists a place for healing our traumatic souls and advancing self-improvement. Joe Biden’s marriage plays a good example here. His becoming the president of the United States is thanks to the considerable encouragement and promotion of Jill Biden, they play an intrinsic role in each other’s lives, overcome the troublesome and tough obstacles together. Therefore, healthy relationships formed by good patterns of behavior are truly eternal factors in bringing personal happiness and boost the potential talents hidden in every people.
To sum up, no human beings can suffer from loneliness for a long time, which work and wealth will never have the capability to solve this issue completely. To put it another way, relationships among friends, family, and co-workers are the most sincere impetus for last-long happiness. All in all, humans are vulnerable and can be easily hurt if not carefully taking loving care of.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1919.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 374.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13101604278 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7732996176 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 176.041082164 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.633689839572 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.083163265 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.933333333 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9333333333 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86666666667 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206431286427 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062480952477 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043926409092 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114965928954 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0485669162712 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.