Adults do less exercise nowadays. Some think that people can be encouraged to live healthy lives through sporting events such as the Olympics or the World Cup. Others think that there are better ways to encourage adults for exercise. Discuss both views and state your opinion.
To paraphrase a popular saying: a healthy spirit requires a healthy body. As such, a healthy lifestyle encompasses nutritious food, a balanced work ethic together with regular excercise. Opinions, however, vary in regards to what motivates people to engage in regular excercise. Popular large-scale recurring sport events that are broadcast on tv and other media are said to be a driver for people to engage in sports. On the other hand, many say there ought to be superior motives that encourages people to excercise apart from these relative rare sport events.
While it is true that big sport events like the Olympics, the World Cup or especially tennis tournaments like Wimbledon, spark interest in actively picking up these sports, it is often a short-lived experience and the enthusiasm fades rather quickly. I remember when tennis giants Boris Becker and Steffi Graf won the Wimbledon Tennis Championships, it created a massive interest in the tennis sport, which was hitherto considered somewhat elitist and aloof. However Becker and Graf brought this sport to the masses, who picked up a racket for the first time in their lives. Nonetheless, the interest in the sport diminished as soon as the tournament was over and only a small percentage continued to practice the sport regularly.
Indeed, to encourage adults to keep practicing a sport seems to require additional stimuli apart from televised popular sporting events. Advertisements from government agencies promoting sports as engaging in social events and practicing a healthy lifestyle, is an effective way of keeping people engaged and attracting more people to pick up some kind of work out. Furthermore, having a vigorous sport curriculum in schools is likely to produce a populace more mindful and committed to regularly engage in sports.
In conclusion, I concur that encouragement to engage in excercise should not depend on the popularity of big sport events only, but requires a steady stream of advertisement promoting the various benefits that comes with being an active member in a sports club or your local gym.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, nonetheless, so, thus, while, apart from, in conclusion, kind of, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1774.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27976190476 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85416356323 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589285714286 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.3338836376 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.461538462 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8461538462 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2307692308 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217613051098 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743434057001 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0445611873302 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127993396595 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0332042036752 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.81 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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