It is true that advertisement nowadays becomes more widespread in our modern society nowadays. While there are some strong arguments against developing this sort of industry, I still believe that it has beneficial effects on the utilizers.
There are several reasons why people might argue that advertising has detrimental effects on customers. Firstly, advertising manipulates people, who usually tend to follow the latest trend associating certain brands with a higher status. It aims to persuade people that buying stuff will make them happier by using more glamorous and successful images than its inherence. Secondly, advertisers often aim their marketing towards children who can easily be influenced by attractive products. Once corruptive children find something interesting, they put pressure on parents to buy them these things.
However, I would argue that these benefits are outweighed by the drawbacks. One main advantage is that advertising is a key part of modern business. Companies need to tell customers about their products and service, hence they utilize advertisement as a tool to inform us about the choices we have. Besides, advertising is a creative industry that employs many people who want to apply for a stable job. Without it, there would be higher unemployment. Finally, advertising which is now made fascinating for spectators is a form of modern art. By creating the advertisement, the people who make it have to have expressions of ideas and themes through creative skills.
In conclusion, advertising certainly has its drawbacks, but I believe that the benefits outweigh them in the long term.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... trend associating certain brands with a higher status. It aims to persuade peopl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, second, secondly, so, still, while, in conclusion, sort of, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1377.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42125984252 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96623955492 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.657480314961 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 426.6 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.5288939117 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.8 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9333333333 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14923670077 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0464875111889 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542090667121 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0947085801087 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541231903741 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.86 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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