Advertising discourages people from being different individuals by making them want to be and look the same, to what extent do you agree or disagree.
In this modern era, advertisement has infiltrated every aspect of our life. People trend to consume the same products and wear the same brands of clothes. It is true that advertisement is one of the reasons that make people lead similar lifestyle, However, in this essay I would argue that there are other factors which contribute to this tend.
Owing to globalization, the products of giant multinational corporations have become ubiquitous, sold almost in every country. These large companies have the power to dominate the global market, in addition to their ability to advertise their products and services in a global level. Moreover people often opt to buy famous brands, because they think they have the best quality in the market.
Adidas, Nike, McDonalds are a few example of well known giant companies, whose products and services are consumed by scores of people around the globe.
Even without the the influence of advertisement, people tends to emulate each other, particularly teenagers, who often buy what their friend buy, and easily persuaded by admired celebrities and their advertisement.
Furthermore, clothes fashion has a tremendous impact on what people wear, clothes manufacturers often follow the latest trends and fashion, which result in most people wear similar outfits.
To sum up, although advertising has a great influence on people, it is not the only factors that caused them to lead similar lifestyle, and consume similar product, there are other factors such as globalization and the global availability of consumer goods.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, well, in addition, such as, it is true, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1316.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 247.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32793522267 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84881614244 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595141700405 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1216535751 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.6 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111553946729 0.244688304435 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0456895006135 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.030884995359 0.0667982634062 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0544206010619 0.151304729494 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0330127055288 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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