The amoun of time spend on sport exercise should be increased in schools in order to tackle the problem of overweight children.Do you think this is the best way deal with this problem? What oher solutions can you suggest?
Nowadays, obesity is becoming common type of problem among youngsters. as a result of this, majority of school leaders find increasing number of exercises would be assist to tackle the problem. But from my personal perspective it is not enough there are sveral sutions.This essay is going to show the other ways of solving the obesity in schools.
First of all, agreed with all above the statements but this paraghraph describes problems of doing regular exercises. As it can be known too many exercise may be dangerous to some children because of their health problem. They find it very difficult to do sport exercises. Thus, most of children try to far from this type of exercise. However, they think they feel shame if they can not do the exercises among their peers.
On the other hand there are several ways to solve this type of issue. First one is special doctors have to work with these children by controlling their quantity of food they are eating. On the other side, it also provides other children's health. And add to this idea, they should manage the nutrients of food and its schedule.By this way, all school can provide pupil's health.Second and the main idea that it is important to point out, if the number of students who are witnessing overweight problem in school, they should organise a club which works all above the ways that stated above, such as controling te amount and nutrients of foods, special exercises and one more thing that can add to this list, special psychologist that encourages, motivates learn the behaviour of the children.
Overall,it can be identified from all above the opinions that I pointed out, there are several other efficient soloutions that can be use apart from regular exercise. But it does not mean regular exercises do not need, all of them necessary if use normal amount.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, thus, apart from, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1518.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84984025559 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54544983948 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543130990415 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 119.751954524 49.4020404114 242% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 108.428571429 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3571428571 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300509105599 0.244688304435 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100638545638 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0673216735469 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177796583102 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0591112749591 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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