Art is considered an essential part of all cultures throughout the world However these days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus to science technology and business Why do you think that is What could be done to encourage more people

It is true that while the interest in art has diminished, that in science, technology and business has witnessed an opposite trend. Two major reasons stands out as responsible for this tendency, which can be resolved by a number of strategies.
To begin with, the decline in focus on art can be attributed to two contributing factors. From education perspective, it is the dogmatic transmission of knowledge that deprives art of the ability to arouse learners’ attention. Indeed, in many countries, most art classes put an emphasis on training connoisseurs of visual art, which mainly deliver theoretical facts about art movements rather than certain techniques. Since that abstract knowledge is quite out of their depths, it is believed to constrain the thirst for discovering the discipline among students. From economic perspective, statistics indicated that most artists live on self-employment or temporary contracts, resulting in lacking pension, holiday pay or maternity benefits. In other words, compared to science or business, art is less stable, and it is understandable when people are increasingly prioritize the former due to a more promising job prospect.
However, solutions can be proposed to remedy the aforementioned problem. Regarding to education systems, it is favourable for schools to facilitate a curricula reform, in which equipping students with hands-on experience and art skills is highly recommended. In fact, this enables students to create their own artworks, and that involvement has been scientifically proved to awaken and boost their interests in the subject. Regarding to management, governments should adopt a policy establishing a mixed funding model for the arts, which grants financial support for talented painters, sculptors or photographers. Specifically, if it comes to residents’ knowledge that pursuing fine art can yield a decent life, the gifted are more likely to embark on creative industry.

Briefly, only by efforts of schools and the authority will a lacking focus on art be entirely solved.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, but, however, if, regarding, so, while, in fact, in other words, it is true, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1745.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.55732484076 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20249969561 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630573248408 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1260663953 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.642857143 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4285714286 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07142857143 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182966838302 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0599693526758 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451280904207 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108911041061 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.033693733928 0.056905535591 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.61 8.58950901804 124% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 78.4519038076 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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