Attending a live performance (for example, a play, concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Recently, it has been stated that participating in a live performance is more gratifying than watching the broadcasted version on television. I utterly agree with this point of view.
There are two compelling reasons for people to attend a live show in lieu of watching it on television. First, the atmosphere in the auditorium can evoke a intriguing and exciting feeling for attendees, which can not be reached when they watch shows through screen. For example, most people go to stadium not only to watch football players and their performances but also to being a part of cheering crowd to warm the environment. Another reason is by attending a live music or competitive show, people can get some memorabilias that spectators are not able to have. For instance, in BLACKPINK’s concerts - concerts of the most popular girl group of KPOP - the girls always toss balls, T-shirts, and cards with their signatures for fans in concert hall, which are craved by fans staying at home and watching broadcasted concert on television.
Some protesters may claim that by watching the performance on television at home helping people save many sources such as time and money. For example, if people want to take part in live shows themselves, they need to spend time travelling to destination where the shows are held and spend money for costly entrance tickets. This suggestion seems reasonable, however, I totally disagree because nowadays the organizers always understand these problems so they always celebrate events in many different regions, provinces or even countries to facilitate for people to attend and the price of events now are all affordable.
In conclusion, I strongly believe taking part in live shows gives people more special memories and feelings than watching on television.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1511.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21034482759 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86021648436 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593103448276 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.1472258516 49.4020404114 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.363636364 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3636363636 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.09090909091 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251130393247 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0947351531196 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407040681062 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150514812881 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0205694229436 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.