Attending a live performance for example a play concert or sporting event is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television To what extent do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

Attending a live performance (for example, a play, concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In this day and age, people appear to tend to have a fancy for joining a direct performance in outdoorsy place or in music theater as well rather than staying at home to enjoy the same event or programme through television’s screen. From my perspective, I disagree with the view because some reasons are attributable to this trend.
On the one hand, Taking part in a live performance will enable them able to enjoy the vibrancy to the fullest as you are paticipated and mingled themselves with the crowd. Like concert, for instance, They can share your happiness in hectic atmosphere with people which have same interest such as music style, favourite singers and songs as well. Furthermore, you have chance to meet up closely with famous stars and celebrities alike. They will be entertaining to see performances with real voice of singers without recorded or lipsynce.
On the other hand, people have also a prospensity for sitting at home to immerse themselves in those programmes or events with the same kind on TV Because when watching via Television, they will need no money to pay ticket fees especially if its tickets are high and they can not afford. Besides, they may be apparently, would be comfortable when just curl up on your comfy couch and eat some food and drinks to dip yourself into those performances. Like me, for example, I like getting the feeling when lying on my lovely bed, eating some snackes and indulging myself into them with ease. Nothing is more wondeful than that. In addition to that, they are not tired when you have to crowd with surrounding people to find available and suitable place to stand or sit or if they miss a seat or standing.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that people still have a thing for sitting at their house to watch performances with the one assortment such as sporting event, concert or play and so on.. instead of going to direct place to see because of some its advantages.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...to see because of some its advantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, besides, but, furthermore, if, may, so, still, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1606.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75147928994 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63334218993 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576923076923 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.3813618955 49.4020404114 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.538461538 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6923076923 7.06120827912 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19549550825 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0682978192504 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637620049291 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132314321433 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388926282022 0.056905535591 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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