Being a celebrity such as a movie star or professional athlete brings problems as well as benefits
Do you think the benefits outweigh the drawbacks ?
These days, being a celebrity is the dream of various residents worldwide due to the luxurious life it may bring us. Although being famous can shorten your way to a successful career, the drawbacks these kinds of jobs can possibly cause should also be put under consideration. From my perspective, I firmly believe that the disadvantages outweigh the counterpart, owing to the public eyes as well as the temporary career.
One of the major aspects that supports my point of view is that you are always in the public eyes. The possibility of being stalked by strangers, as well as the hunger of latest news from the media would haunt any celebrity, which leads to a lack of privacy. According to the belief of the majority of the public, famous people are the model roles and the images for everybody to look up to, so a variety of actions that are normal to ordinary people could be considered inappropriate for them. Moreover, these occupations attract a large number of haters who have a strong will of criticizing everything without distinguishing either it makes a positive or negative impact. These people, in addition to an offensive attitude would be a threat to numerous mental illnesses, which leads to physical suffering also. With the development of modern technology as an efficient supporter, this issue is even more uncontrollably severe.
Another influence that can directly affect the celebrities is the time span that they can remain their jobs. It is clear that professional athletes, movie stars or singers would find the limit of their career before the age of 40. As a result, retirement is unavoidable, and they will tend to take part in another era. Even though it is undeniable that they will be memorized, there stands almost no chance for ancient celebrities to compete with the younger and more energetic generation since the only thing that they can surpass their descendants is experience. Maintaining health by medical treatments and medicines is also a solution to tackle this problem. However, it can result in several consequences in the future, along with the fact that it can waste a gigantic sum of money and time-consuming. These challenging tasks prevent the mentioned method from being available.
Overall, the continual of the occupation and the loss of privacy play a vital role in the development of the celebrities. In my opinion, everyone should acquire a deep understanding, together with a firm determination in order not to get into risks before taking part in these industries.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, well, in addition, as a result, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2115.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 420.0 315.596192385 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03571428571 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93946001335 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 176.041082164 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592857142857 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 506.74238477 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1605161864 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.5 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61111111111 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14624140725 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0391169899267 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.036407987356 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.075842397346 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546689188206 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 78.4519038076 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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