Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

In university, there are various types of student, who may come from a rich family as well as born in poverty. While someone may claim that there is a superiority for rich person compared with poor student, I strongly believe that both of them can find the obstruction during the period of being a university pupil.

To begin with, expanding social friendship may hinder poor pupil studying in university. since there is a huge campus rather than secondary school, pupil is impossible to maintain a fixed friendzone naturally as well as necessary to meet new friend actively when becoming a freshman in university. However, the social cost to know unknown is high. For instance, campus may hold a camping for pupils to broaden their social circle, they have to pay an expensive price for the camping, food and transportation. also, there are several chances to attend the high-class meeting over the university studying. Thus, economic matter may obstruct poor student to expand their friendzone easily.

On the other hand, though the rich is not worried to meet new friends, they may feel trouble for the opportunities of practical experience, that is cumulative from secondary school. Because their identify is valuable by their abundant living, it is common that rich student do not own any working experience, such as part-time job in summer holiday. This circumstance may cause difficult to find an incredible internship or even prospection. Hence, the rich would suffer some barrier about working experience in the study career.

In conclusion, since everyone may face certain issues, not only about social friendship but also about practical experience, I absolutely think that both poor and rich undergraduates may suffer different problems in university career.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, second, so, thus, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1496.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2676056338 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82193212752 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609154929577 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.2551643623 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.076923077 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8461538462 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4615384615 7.06120827912 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158152021915 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553373603537 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485609576671 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107908312666 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0418047229453 0.056905535591 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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