Childhood obesity is an increasing problem in Australia. As many as two third of children are now obese. Schools have a responsibility to monitor what their students eat and the amount of exercise they do. To what extent do you agree or disagree this statement?
Obesity in the younger generations is becoming increasingly problematic, especially in Australia where approximately 33% of children suffer from this preventable disease. Some people have suggested that schools should be responsible for the prevention and treatment of their students’ weight issues by monitoring their food intake and exercise output. This essay will discuss why I completely disagree with this proposition because it is far too draconian.
The main reason, why schools should not monitor children’ food intake and exercise output, is because it is not their job to do so; it is the jobs of the parents. Schools are responsible for education, and they certainly educate children on the value of nutrition and exercise but watching what they eat and how much they exercise is not their purview. For example, it would be far too invasive for a teacher to ask students what they have been eating at home and how much they have been exercising. This should lead to all sorts of problems with parents and teachers even though it may yield results. In short, parents should remain responsible for raising their children healthily while schools should focus on educating them.
A secondary reason why schools should not meddle with children’ diets and exercise regimes is that it may have negative psychological impacts on the students themselves. Although teachers are excellent role models for children, again, it is not their role to monitor their health. If a teacher were to single out a student for being overweight, for instance, it could have profound negative effects on the student including isolating them from their peers and promoting bullying. Even if a student is obese, a teacher should not reference this in the classroom and certainly not ask them about their eating and exercise habits. Clearly, this is a bad idea.
This essay discussed why schools should not be part of a child’s prevention or treatment for obesity because it is not their role and it may cause mental problems for the child at hand. In my opinion, I completely disagree with the proposition that childhood obesity is the responsibility of schools.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, second, so, while, for example, for instance, in short, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1828.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20797720798 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9594653913 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487179487179 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 548.1 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4310711102 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.866666667 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53333333333 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314401391777 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111746846668 0.084324248473 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501548939167 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197912143853 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498869525041 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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