Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic social and commercial perspectives What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures

Essay topics:

Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

Nowadays, the reality of global capitalism has implicated towards children educational standard which should implemented by most of countries. By virtue of materialism, educational perspectives in the contemporary era should inline with the growth of economic interests. Due to these conditions, all of children in the world might be required to learn a number of lessons by pressures.

However, the reality of pressure in educational system tend to more negative impact then its positivity. In japan, even though the country were acknowledged as a pressure country, there are plethora of children depressed and designated to go out from school. Moreover, numerous psychiatry hospitals in japan were fulfilled by more children then old generations.

According to these conditions, the necessary for formulating educational system is required. At the first strategy, the educational system should be measured by various components, such as; a) the happiness which correlated to the social cohesive; b) the comfortable which formulated by making enjoyable milieu in the class; c) the cheerful by functioning school as a playground. At the second strategy, the educational model should facilitated students to improve their knowledge based on their passion.

Votes
Average: 6.8 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 125, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the countries') or simply say ''most countries''.
Suggestion: most of the countries; most countries
...al standard which should implemented by most of countries. By virtue of materialism, educational ...
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Line 3, column 85, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...nal system tend to more negative impact then its positivity. In japan, even though t...
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Line 3, column 327, Rule ID: COMPARISONS_NNS_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'more children than'?
Suggestion: more children than
...ry hospitals in japan were fulfilled by more children then old generations. According to these ...
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Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...n japan were fulfilled by more children then old generations. According to these ...
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Line 5, column 192, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: a; the
...easured by various components, such as; a the happiness which correlated to the socia...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, moreover, second, so, then, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 5.0 24.0651302605 21% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1070.0 1615.20841683 66% => OK
No of words: 188.0 315.596192385 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.6914893617 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70287850203 4.20363070211 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22459777076 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 176.041082164 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.632978723404 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 333.0 506.74238477 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4945347809 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.888888889 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8888888889 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190823159513 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0716382402023 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0366672897161 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116011618346 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0335359516248 0.056905535591 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.72 12.4159519038 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.92 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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