Computers do not help children learn more effectively. On the contrary, the use of computers has a negative effect on children’s physical and mental development.
To what exten do you agree or disargee
In modern social life, technology has become more and more developed and computers play an important role in everyone ‘s live but in orther words, that bringing many drawbacks for children seriously. Some people suppose that using computers not only having negative impacts on young generation ‘s health but also reducing communication in relationship and society. Personally, I agree with this opinion.
First of all, using electric devices like computer, smartphone regularly that impacting on young people. Causing many illness, for instance, the children keep their eyes glued to the screen for a long time that makes their eyes gradually worse. It is obvious to see from my country, lots of children merely under 10 of age but they must wear glasses. In addition, if utilizing the electricity devices include mobille phone, computers,… during the lasting time, the wave of them will cause dangerous sickness such as headache disorder, heart attack, ...
Not only effecting on mental development of the young generation but also impacting on physical presence. That is the vital point why at the present , there is the largest number of children has been overweight. The main reason is that they just sit down in font of the screen and do not take part in any activities. It is easy to make obesity. Besides, do not get out of home, connecting with others that cause their communication and relationship get worse.
To sum up, althought technology helps human population ‘s live has become easier that also bringing useless sides, especial for the growth of young people. Hence, I think that parents should have strict rules to control using computer their kids.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, if, so, for instance, i think, in addition, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1415.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20220588235 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63746425557 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.647058823529 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.5815163466 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.071428571 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4285714286 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.85714285714 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210793878414 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058892609105 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409885838143 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118705896507 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0550828576346 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.