countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world Do you think this is a positive or negative development

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countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, individuals all around the world have possible opportunities to buy similar products from various international companies even in their own countries. I myself am in fond of this alteration because of some satisfying results and impacts on people which will be mentioned in this essay.

To commence with, this condition has affected on humans in diverse positive ways. The first significant one, which has been a debating issue thorough their lifespan, is feeling difference between people in various countries. For example, in the past, people especially in third world countries where they have not felt content about their situations, they could not afford to buy the products which people in developed countries are used to buy. This has propelled deprived people to not only feel miserable, but also to think citizens in other countries with luxuries lives are preferences for many companies. As a result, although all the individuals are the same as each other, some of them may think they are more important in the world which has made this planet to be racist.

In addition, another factor which could demonstrate this issue to be more positive than negative, is the profit which those international companies would make by exporting their own products. It is true that gaining a great deal of money for them are provided by selling goods in pricey costs in developed countries for prosperous people. On other hand, if they send their goods to oversees, they will make even bigger profit. Also, they would be well-known in entire world which will lead them to expand their business in order to gain more achievements.

In conclusion, despite several negative aspects which is not considerable when it comes to not only equality between individuals and making people to be similar in amenities , but also a great deal of money and reputation which companies could obtain, this improvement could be called as helpful and effective one.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, third, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1645.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15673981191 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71245499675 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542319749216 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.2726164055 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.083333333 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5833333333 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252101705192 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0917310914775 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052277801665 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151096994887 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0724035857154 0.056905535591 127% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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