Education for young people is important in many countries. However, some people think that the government should spend more money on education in adult populations who cannot read and write. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, the prosperity of a nation depends heavily on its education system. Traditionally, the focus of education in most countries has been on the youth. However, in second and third world countries, there is a debate as to whether governments should invest in educating young generations or in literacy programs for the adult populace. In my perspective, I think that both points of view should be concerned.
On the one hand, in the context of the Fourth Industrial Revolution is taking place strongly, the quality of human resources play a vital role in reflecting the socio-economic development of each country, so there is no doubt that authorities should spend more money on curriculums for young people to create highly qualified human resources. In addition, people work in fields such as technology and finance need to be methodically and in-depth training to be able to meet market needs.
On the other hand, there are many compelling reasons why promoting literacy among adults is a worthy cause to invest in. First, a higher proportion of the population who know how to read and write can give the economy a healthy boost. Illiteracy is a major barrier in the job-seeking because it not only not suitable for the recruitment criteria of employers but also prevents people from getting a better education. Putting more efforts in teaching literacy skills to adults can improve their chances of being hired and, by extension, reduce unemployment and poverty. Furthermore, increasing adults literacy can be a potent tool to curb crime. People who are unable to find a job due to being illiterate may resort to illegal activities to survive. For example, in Africa, violence and criminal activities in the region have been rife for years - a situation that is deeply rooted in a high rate of uneducated population. This is a testament to how allocating to literacy education could be instrumental in minimizing society crime rate.
In conclusion, while the importance of education for the young is clear, I believe that raising literacy rates in adults is also an area where the government's funding and attention are warranted.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'adults'' or 'adult's'?
Suggestion: adults'; adult's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, so, third, while, as to, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1796.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11680911681 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95052173563 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612535612536 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.3882284478 49.4020404114 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.733333333 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285605573258 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803242016477 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431785987495 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162943401463 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0306812362272 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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