Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
In this modern age, when a rise in the trend to go for extreme sports has emerged, debates varied about whether risks should be considered and whether restrictions are required. While I am of the opinion that sports like skydiving or bungee jumping pose fatal threats to players, illegalizing them is unnecessary and might cause a sportsman to lose his sporting spirit.
On the one hand, there are undeniably some extreme sports that have been executed across the globe, like parachuting or skiing. Those types of sports, or skydiving, to be specific, are life-threatening for many reasons. Firstly, players who are not professionals may encounter an inability to use safety equipment, such as a jumpsuit or parachute, which are of the utmost paramount when landing. A week ago, a sky diver's fatal accident was recorded by camera in Quang Ninh, a province in the northeast of Vietnam, which was said to be attributed to a lack of experience in his parachute usage. Secondly, inveterate travelers suffering from mental illnesses, such as acrophobia, might become unconscious due to extreme height from the aircraft to the ground. This could also result in fatality if a player lose his consciousness.
On the other hand, I believe that prohibitions should not be capitalized when there is an increasing number of adventurous players who would take part in those extreme games. A prominent reason is that sportsmanship will be lost if inveterate adventurers are unable to partake in sports that arouse their enthusiasm. Besides, another worth-noting rationale is the unreliable rumors which emphasize the unavailability of gadgets. In fact, agencies with permission to operate such hazardous games are under a law obligation to ensure and commit to players' safety by vigilantly censoring equipment before coming into use, therefore, they are legitimate to use.
In conclusion, despite the fact that extreme sports pose perilous risks to players' lives, I firmly hold the view that they should not be eliminated due to the decline in sporting spirit.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1726.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2303030303 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98663075539 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606060606061 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.744281114 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.769230769 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3846153846 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8461538462 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195544795847 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0616741363193 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421019593086 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124353854657 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0259614744233 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1726.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2303030303 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98663075539 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606060606061 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.744281114 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.769230769 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3846153846 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8461538462 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195544795847 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0616741363193 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421019593086 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124353854657 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0259614744233 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.