Film stars and music celebrities may earn a great deal of money and live in luxurious surroundings, but many of them lead unhappy lives. Do you agree?
In recent decades, most of movie stars and music celebrities have gained popularity which provides them with a lot of money and luxurious lifestyles. Although some argue that the money they earn and their luxury come at the expense of their happiness, actually the source of this problem is their choices.
There is a plain truth that decisions on life balance including time and popularity balance have huge impacts on human’ daily mood. First, although every singer and actor is aware of time spending on work, some choose their popularity at the expense of their leisure and privacy. For example, while many stars spend time for families and friends, the others, otherwise, prefer social network, which usually brings more harm than good. Second, popularity acts as an incentive for negative desires such as social evil exposure only if human did not control their minds. In reality, majority of well-known teenagers are choosing to use their money on alcohol and even committing juvenile delinquency.
Moreover, every single job in our world has its own difficulties in term of pressures and job satisfactions. First, public pressures can not be counted as stars’ dissatisfaction. In reality, many actors earn their living from public and these actors are also motivated by public’s comments. Second, people whose jobs related to arts are more likely to have a better living standard lives compared other careers, which might lead them to higher expectations. Since they often take it for granted, these lower-standard lives do not mean that their lives are sad in practice.
In conclusion, currently many film stars and music idols make a lot of money and live in their extravagant world at the expense of their time and popularity balance. Nevertheless, the happiness of life is completely decided by individuals, but not by the material.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y individuals, but not by the material.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21666666667 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77739086194 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603333333333 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.0099078453 49.4020404114 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 111.785714286 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4285714286 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.28571428571 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17730589927 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589560539786 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605909858374 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121470725417 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542196370296 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.