Helping around people.
In out life there are many people with difficult and unhappiness.
They need help from everyone and the community. Last summer, my local volunteer group visited a nursing home for the elderly artists. When we came, those seniors were very happy because they might see us as their grandchildren. After greeting them, we started to clean up the inner house and the yard. We brought out the old broken stuffs then painted the wall in a brighter color. Another group made sure the yard was free of trash and pile of unnecessary things. There were about a hundred of us, so we finished all of our tasks in just one day. In the evening, some of the old ladies cooked some delicious dishes for us, and we had a small party before we headed home.
They also prepared a small play for us, and we felt that their passion for art was never faded. We had great time together, and the nursing had a better appearance thanks to all of our efforts. When we packed our stuffs to go home, the attachment of those seniors even made some of us cry. We promised to pay a visit soon to bring more happiness and vitality to that place. The volunteer trip was beyond my expectation, and I realized that life is only meaningful when I know how to help people around me.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 564, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... tasks in just one day. In the evening, some of the old ladies cooked some delicious dishes...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1019.0 1615.20841683 63% => OK
No of words: 231.0 315.596192385 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.41125541126 5.12529762239 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89854898053 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31006639277 2.80592935109 82% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.614718614719 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 318.6 506.74238477 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 20.5282284493 49.4020404114 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.7857142857 106.682146367 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.28571428571 7.06120827912 18% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.05524480574 0.244688304435 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0224739171466 0.084324248473 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556211149121 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0333128141079 0.151304729494 22% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0304537137834 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 13.0946893788 58% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 50.2224549098 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.0 12.4159519038 64% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 78.4519038076 50% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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