The increase in people’s life expectancy means that they have to work older to pay for their retirement. One alternative is that people start to work at a younger age. Is this alternative a positive or negative development?
As people’s life expectancy is becoming higher every day, older citizens have to devote more of their time to work. However, some decide to work at a younger age. From my own perspective, this trend is positive.
Entering the workforce at an earlier age can be a good choice for people’s better financial circumstances when they become old. The younger a person is, the more energetic and persistent he or she is in their job. Without a shadow of a doubt, youths can perform most office-related tasks with their zeal and the best degree of their productivity. They are less absent-minded and would make fewer blunders and work while being capable of multi-tasking. Given this, promotion prospects are promising, and they are likely to climb up the career ladder within some years. As a consequence, their income could be colossal enough to well afford them for future
Besides, unlike the old citizens who might choose to start work late or fail to make headway in their career progression, the proactive young individuals would have been wise if they opt for this alternative of working early. There is more time to sample different work environments, learn new skills and meet people from diverse backgrounds without having to concern themselves about the low salary or missed opportunities triggered by job-hopping. They can do this as long as they like since the youth age permits experience and gives them plenty of freedom to pursue their dreams. The salary then still accumulates in value, but the youths have job satisfaction and live their life to the fullest.
By way of conclusion, I would contend that the contemporary situation in which young people start making a living earlier than in the past is a positive development.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, so, still, then, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1455.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82950827436 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635738831615 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.337225078 49.4020404114 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.923076923 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3846153846 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.23076923077 7.06120827912 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.371049292415 0.244688304435 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114920288378 0.084324248473 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0714738916898 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215773511448 0.151304729494 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0863586361064 0.056905535591 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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