An increasing number of people are choosing to have cosmetic surgery in order to improve their appearance. Why do people have operations to change the way they look? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
There are more people having plastic surgery to elevate their appearance. I believe that this is a negative trend among individuals and the reasons behind this development will be explained in this essay.
The desire to improve appearance through cosmetic surgery can result from two factors. The first factor is related to individuals’ wishes to have a better appearance, so that they can boost their confidence. For example, people with facial abnormalities such as cleft lips can finally smile normally and brightly again with the help of cosmetic surgeons, which is a boost of confidence to them whenever communicating with others. Another factor is due to the everchanging beauty standards in society that force people to follow if they want to be considered beautiful. Therefore, more people choose cosmetic interventions to have similar body types or facial features like celebrities just to fit the trendy beauty stereotypes.
In my opinion, this phenomenon causes problems for people rather than benefits them. Firstly, health risks are potential in the cosmetic surgery industry since some incompetent surgeons can possibly damage clients’ bodies or faces by not guaranteeing surgical protocols. For instance, there are some cases of failed nose surgeries that cause suffocation for clients. Secondly, the trend of cosmetic surgery to improve appearance can lead to insecurities about natural beauty. The more individuals are pursuing the prevailing beauty standard such as the hourglass figure, the more insecure people with other body types might feel, thereby wanting to alter their looks through the help of plastic surgeons in pursuit of external validation.
In conclusion, although the reasons for this trend relate to individuals’ tendencies to become more confident and urges to follow beauty standards in society, I believe that it is a negative development due to the health risks and insecurities about natural beauty it brings.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1666.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51655629139 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89051416637 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562913907285 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.4209853598 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.153846154 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2307692308 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1538461538 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234157706782 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0919859303537 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0516771131655 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149517734421 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0673537463011 0.056905535591 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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