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International community must act immediately to ensure all nations to reduce their consumption of fossil fuels e.g gas and oil. Do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics: International community must act immediately to ensure all nations to reduce their consumption of fossil fuels e.g gas and oil. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that we human beings have been overconsuming fossil fuels such as gas, oil, and coal in recent decades, which arise the view that global community must deal with this at once to curb their consumption of these sources. In my opinion, I strongly agree with this point of view for the following reasons.

One possible reason is that the adverse impacts of using fossil fuels are evident, not only on human's lives, but also on the environment. It is fair to say that the large amount of greenhouse gases stemming from the combustion of gas, coal and so on have been released into atmosphere, which contribute partially to global warming. The resultant high sea level is irreversible, leading to the loss of territory, especially those countries have the long coastal line such as Vietnam and Philippines. Many inhabitants living in these countries would, therefore, inevitably face housing shortage and have to leave their countries, becoming the would-be refugees in the foreseeable future. Moreover, air pollution is the main grave environmental problem as a result of burning fossil fuels, which could lead to human health problems. China, for example, is facing the unprecedentedly frequent "pink" smog containing toxic fumes stemming from fossil fuel combustion, which put many inhabitants in the jeopady of suffering lung cancer and other respitory ailments.

Being confronted by these severe problems, plausible urgent actions need to be taken from all nations immediately to solve and alleviate such problems. It is fallacy to say that this is individual responsibility of each nation and there is no need to collabrate with each other, because the underlying consequences are on a global scale and a country alone, cannot resolve the wole outcomes without any cooperative efforts. Besides, the cost of calling a halt to using fossil fuels or at least curbing partially the amount of them on a daily basis and switching to other eco-friendly resources such as solar or wind power are prohibitive. Therefore, many countries would be frustrated from curbing fossil fuels on this economical grounds if there is no collabrative endeavour from all nations around the world, especially those affluent states like America or England, which could inject to some extent to help the economically deprived parts in the Earth deal with this prolem.

In conclusion, I completely advocate with the idea that global community have to act immediate ly to reduce the fossil fuel consumption.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... to reduce the fossil fuel consumption.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, moreover, so, therefore, at least, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2108.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 402.0 315.596192385 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24378109453 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90462060703 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 176.041082164 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587064676617 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.9593409475 49.4020404114 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.153846154 106.682146367 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.9230769231 20.7667163134 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3076923077 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195038536669 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0665675504289 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0646605913943 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141985021742 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603495658419 0.056905535591 106% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 13.0946893788 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 50.2224549098 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.8 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 78.4519038076 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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