It has been suggested that everyone in the world wants to own a car a TV and a fridge Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of such a development

Essay topics:

It has been suggested that everyone in the world wants to own a car, a TV and a fridge. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of such a development.

In the current society, it is believed that individuals around the world desire to have a private car, a television and a fridge. My following essay will analyze both the benefits and drawbacks of this tendency.

On the one hand, there are several reasons why many critics think that own a car, a TV and a fridge can have outstanding advantages. First of all, this is the necessary demands of people in their life, have the own private car to commute to work, a television up-to-date breaking news happening around the world in general and in their locality in special, own a fridge to preserve a food. Secondly, owning these facilities bring the opportunity to boost national economy thanks to boosting the shopping demand. Thus, it is clear that owning a car, a TV and a fridge has positive effects in their own ways.

On the other hand, this tendency also has an adverse effect on human life. The obvious evidence is that each resident could own the private car makes the environment become more polluted than before. This is because the emission from the gas and oil, especially CFC gases in a refrigerator release in the atmosphere is a major contributor to the greenhouse effect. In addition, purchasing more the personal car could lead to traffic congestion which is the dilemma issue for the government. This can well be illustrated by the fact that in Hanoi, the administrator is releasing the new policy to cut off the private motorbike in the year of 2020 and I strongly believe that in the future, the personal car step-by-step is gradually being removed.

In conclusion, the above analyses show that owning a car, a TV and a fridge have both pros and cons, however, I believe it is an inevitable trend in the future

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Average: 7.4 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 383, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'food'.
Suggestion: food
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, in addition, in conclusion, in general, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1438.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76158940397 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72194292568 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546357615894 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.6433775672 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.833333333 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1666666667 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3333333333 7.06120827912 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176351038644 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0672965036742 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571241125216 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107296558533 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.042939204141 0.056905535591 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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