It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and
their personal lives.
Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?
It is true that taking risks can produce some unexpected and good resultes in both professional and personal lives, but if the advantages of taking risk can overweight the disadvangtages is still in argument. From my perspective, I tend to believe that there are more disadvantages and it is not worthy taking risks.
There is no doubt that taking risks can create new opportunities and change our lives dramatically. It may help us make new friends, find new jobs with higher level of salary and build our independence if we are successful. Some people relate taking risks with higher profits and better living quality, even the quick path to change their social layers. The evidences that could prove it are numerous, such as Jack Ma, who used to be an English teacher, taking risks to hold his own company and become the richest man in China now.
However, those succussful samples are the minority, and there are many deficiencies occur to us when talking about taking risks and can have really bad impacts on us than we have imagined. The main one is the possibility to lose our peaceful and stable lives that are always decribed as a happy family and no concerns about food and accommodation. The unecpected changes which taking risks will bring to us are also the main source of stress and depression and probably cause some mental health issues. For example, my friend Zhu decided to work in an new area that she was more interested in and she resigned from her company and lived for five months without any incomes. She was stuck into a long depression untill she found a new job and lost confidence because of the failures she faced when looking for a new job.
In conclusion, althought there are several advantages when taking risks, the potencial terrible influence on us shouldn't be neglected.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, really, so, still, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, talking about, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1504.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82051282051 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62945561246 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.599358974359 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 31.5074946992 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.333333333 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 7.06120827912 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314286009585 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110897073026 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0857921249544 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183543910191 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0807707205509 0.056905535591 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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