It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
Some people believe that the development of technology leads to traditional cultures to disappear. I partly agree with this assertion, while it may be true in case of some societies, others still are flourish by technology.
On the one hand, technology might take responsibilities for traditional cultures. Firstly, the advance of technology has driven industrialization in developed countries that contribute to the disappearance of traditional ways of life. For example, in Viet Nam, those who live in small villages have a strong sense of identity because they share customs and beliefs. Secondly, with transport, manufacturing, communications developing, ambitious people might tend to move to big cities to find work. As a result, families and village communications are likely to distribute. Finally, utilizing machines seem to lead to losing the making of some handcrafts. For mechanic process provides a large number of products with low-cost and saving time, the handful of jobs as sculpture, … would become inexistence.
On the other hand, in some parts of the world, traditional cultures still thrive. For example, there are ethnic groups in some mountains have been completely untouched by the development of technology. In these tribal communications, traditional skills are passed on to children by their parents and grandpa. Furthermore, technology allows people to advertise their cultures without paying. By some online application and internet, the traveling agency can easily advertise their cultural heritage, languages, ... to visitors without paying. In that way, the countries are able to make more profit; and their norm will be well-known.
In conclusion, in some areas, the advance of technology is a cause of making less the reduction of traditional cultures, but in other traditional cultures have survived and prospect.
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...ndcrafts. For mechanic process provides a large number of products with low-cost and saving time,...
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...norm will be well-known. In conclusion, in some areas, the advance of technology...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1580.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.64285714286 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24654258455 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.76152304609 252% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9671130061 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.9411764706 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4705882353 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.94117647059 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257579352581 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0793510573976 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0744806098215 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180071689394 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0493649418349 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.31 50.2224549098 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.14 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.