It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
People have different views about whether the national history or international history is more necessary for children to study at schools. In my opinion, both types of history above are equally important, so I believe that it would be better for students to have a chance to acquire a deep knowledge of local history as well as world history.
On the one hand, the importance of studying local history at schools is certainly undeniable. It is true that local history can help bring a community together, because no matter how different you are, you have shared history. When student learn about their own country’s history, they will feel somewhat proud of their country and like they ‘belong’ in their country. For example, by studying how people in the past gave up their lives, Vietnamese juveniles will respect and be grateful more to the value of the way of life and liberty that they enjoy today. Moreover, through knowing about the local history, young generations will know about wonderful core values and precious lessons which have been passed by their ancestors and will be motivated to carry on the best customs for generations to come. Japanese, for instance, have always been known as one of the most fortitude races in this world. This is due to the fact that they have learned from their war failures in the past.
On the other hand, studying world history is also very crucial for every children. Firstly, the trend of the world today is globalisation and international integration, by interacting with other people from other cultures, a country can have opportunities to receive many marvelous achievements of countless fields from the world. However, this tendency obviously requires all people and especially children to have some knowledge of world history to form a mutual understanding in order to blend fully into this world community. Secondly, all the countries in the world have to come through some certain stages of developing and revolution, and there were also some drawbacks of developing like slavery and ethnic conflicts. Therefore, it is vital for the young generations who will become the leader of their country in the future to know about the lessons to be able to avoid those which are not good for their nation.
In conclusion, for the reasons I have mentioned, I believe that schools should teach students both local and world history
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2012.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 397.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06801007557 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73828899573 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51637279597 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 625.5 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.6843873717 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.133333333 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4666666667 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.1333333333 7.06120827912 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254797292813 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0968496291451 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475254793417 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175168811388 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396748079339 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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